by Samuelx
...Qatar with Love"? That's like the cut/paste "From Laval with Love."
Another commenter said it best: take a basic writing class. Garbage in story that does nothing to contribute anything meaningful. 1*
And the sadest thing is that the only creative and interesting writing in all of your stories are the comments...mostly negative. Even the very disteastfull porn add is a bit more interesting than the whole thing I'm sure....well just guessing must admit that I just read the comments....some people are very clever. About youas a writer the positive thing I have to say is that you are very very prolifoc and resiliant.
You mentioned more places in this piece of crap than I've seen since a geography book! They did nothing to further the story, but you included them anyway. Why not take a break and enroll in a basic writing class?