by freak4candy
I enjoyed reading this story, it is a great start. I hope you will continue to write more parts to this story soon.
Thanks! There actually is a part 2 in the works right now. :)
I love that kind of passion, and passion for writing; the combination of sexy and sweet and smart which makes me hope for more. Keep writing!
I liked your story very much. The sentences have a hurried cadence, but there is a lovely hanging suspense over it all. Very unusual style, but very successful. Well Done!
Candy, Very well done I'm sure you a more than happy with these comments to your very first story to be posted on Lit.com. Your style is indeed interesting and worthy of note.
Keep up the good work
Respect and Honour
Hitchhiker
A well-written story with a fun last paragraph. This made me laugh because once, many years ago, I was visiting a couple of friends whose hamster was an escape artist. Once it burrowed into their sofa and when I sat down it bit me on the arse! Not funny at the time because I had a king-sized hangover. Happy days. Must point out one error, Candy: 'naval' is to do with navy things, the belly-button is the 'navel'. But an enjoyable read.
to fucking Sage Carter. At times, there are relationships so passionate and so intense, that you just need to tell everyone about it, even your pet. Enjoyed every word of this short, yet, elaborately detailed story. A shame that Chapter 2 never materialized.