by Evil Alpaca
And away we go on what already looks like a rollercoaster ride of fun (both interdimensional & intersexual). Interesting idea with the Talent and how it manifests - should be fun to see where we go from here.
Once again, EXCELLENT work!
Just amazingly well done! Not just hot sex (of which there was plenty) but characters that are vivid and likable. Can't wait until you get the next chapter done. :)
a great start to a soon to come great story, cant wait for the next chapter
Wasn't sure about the premise to start with, but it's really growing on me now. Hope you've got more chapters set up and ready to go, because I can't wait to read the rest of this one!
"Oh . . . kay," she said. "This is new."all your stories are very good but your fantasy stories are a class apart.And I do like them with a hetero angle present.
and your idea "talents" -- like a fusion of x-men ,is something that at least I have not heard before.
"Living hair . . . that's a first,"
I'm so glad you didn't abandon your "Strays."
Looking forward to the rest of the series.
I loved it.
The characters are so nicely done. Believable and well drawn.
The background is fed to the reader in just the right dosage, making it easy to suspend belief.
The sex, as always, is enormously hot.
Well done!
is an amazingly well told and thought out story. I am seriously impressed and can't wait to read on.
I love literotica for it's commumtiy and diversity. I'm in awe of this story, the well crafted writing combined with the plot that somehow fuses with string theory and x men, wow..and again wow.
I didn't sleep last night because I had to read every chapter.
again well done
You are making the mistake to allow the graphic descriptions of intercourse sway your control over the story line here..a lot of people enjoy those 'encounters' but, as you actually try to tell a story you shouldn't allow those peoples ideas of what is 'proper' to steer your story line.. In a good story good sex is integrated, not taking the upper hand.. Otherwise it's a wanking story and and your story line will just be the excuse for 'getting it on'.. You better make up your mind here and remember that you can't please them all.. cheers Yoron.
But I've just come across this story by trawling the top stories in Sci fi / Fantasy. Loving the characters, plot, and dialogue. I'm particularly drawn to the subtext of humour and sharp wit showing rounded and developed kin and friendships among the strays. The erotic sex scenes are blended quite well into the fabric of the social reality you're introducing us to on stages. Can't wait to read the rest of this.
The writing is pretty good and story was also until the ending, living hair is not so new.
I remember reading X-men comics as a kid (a long time ago!) Medusa was a villainess with living hair. I'm gonna read the rest of this series, like I said the writing is pretty good and evilalpaca is my favorite writer on the site, but I wonder if Janes' hair will be as versital as Medusas? She could could pick locks, fight and even use her hair to sort of hang glide; wonder if I'll find some of that in the chapters to come.
One of the best lesbian stories I'm too lesbian to read the straight sex though but I'm sure others can and enjoy it keep going very talented
I love weird & different & unique. Keeps me guessing! I really love the various types of were stories but I also like to be surprised.
You had her shave her pubes to avoid the living pubic hair conundrum.
Fascinating story so far, surprising I haven't seen it before, it's been here forever.
Your fantasy is my joy ..... Absolutely stunning and fan writing already in first chapter catching me
No matter how many times I've read this chapter, the first page where we meet Jane and hear her story, still makes me tear up. Thank you for sharing.