All Comments on 'Gabby'

Great writing style, loved the way you moved the characters along until they "got together." Well done!

I like it a lot. I can see potential for the development of the characters we've just met. There must be a few ready made groupings within a staff as big as this - bowling teams, dancing groups, pool fans etc. I like the similar outlooks Matt and Gabby share on other people. Work on this please, and I'll be back

Very nice story, you developed the characters well. I hope you will give us more installments. I will be looking for them.

Years ago I worked for a small, family-owned supermarket that would hold events like this. Nothing ever got as interesting as what's in your story, but it definitely reminded me of those days. That combined with your great characters makes me hope there's more stories of Gabby and Matt in the near future.

Reminded me of days gone by. Well written. Great story.

This was a great story. I like reading things and feeling like I can see what's going on through the main character's eyes, or, feel like i'm right there in the moment. You did an excellent job of building up the characters to their 'boiling point'. Damn Janice is a skank for real! lol

Plain Jane or not, this story rocks! I remember company picnics, but not like this. Too bad, I would have loved to been in Matt's shoes..

Wayne