All Comments on 'Gap Year Ch. 01'

look forward to the next chapters, wonder if the mother will join in at some stage?

I thoroughly enjoy your writing style. Couple that with a great plot line and it makes for an entertaining read. Thank You. Ronnie W.

I liked the pace that the story was taking early on - very natural for a true virgin. Then all of a sudden, the two are in bed without any real foreplay or seeming build up. Other than that this story line looks promising and the writing is generally good although some personal proofing (not just a spell checker) may be in order.

Very nice - more, please.

Lukas

You do a pretty good job of keeping this realistically paced, and you don't go overboard with the descriptions, which is good. You seemed to keep plot better before he went to town with Dawn, and plot is a rare thing in Lit--I'd let it shine a bit more.