All Comments on 'Gary and Jayne Ch. 02'

Why oh why couldn't I have "run into" you when I lived in Fla.haha A very nicely written story. I could easiely picture in my mind every scene. Sex in nature is beautiful, the chance of being caught adds much to the urgancy to get your partner to climax and cum yourself. But always be careful of the ants and sand.haha I do hope you will have your lovers in a motel, at least a bed, with "normal" clothing. Spandex is such a hastle to put back on.haha I know Jay wants a taste of him, I just hope Gary will want to taste her as well. Nothing quite so sweet as a pussy that is ready and more than willing. A bit longer on the next chapters, give me time to stroke off and join the cum fest.haha Richard

You have ammended your story to make it more platable for the male reader,husband was a cheat,sex suddenly no good,ect.Your still happley doing what you never were going to do,cheat on husband,children,marriage,yourself,your fuck buddies family,and the family dog.If you can't or won't stop,get a job and ask for a divorce.Writting good,don't like your story even a little,Thanks.

A very good story, well written, erotic and enjoyable! If there is going to be a chapter three, they should do it next to a stream.Plus maybe next time jayne could hint to gary that its her safe time of the month and let him come inside her. thanks again for a great story and hopes theres a chapter 3!

James from Ohio

I admit you have me wanting; the story you create, the images you set up, the possibility of this fantasy as reality. You are a good descriptive writer. I want to read more of her thoughts, desires, reactions and HER plans. To this end adding more of her dialogue on her wants and how she feels would be good. You seem to write it to attract or please the male reader, or is my maleness reading it like that. I would suggest more of her feelings and describe what SHE is doing mentally and physically, her desires and sexual emotions. Phaedrus49.

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