All Comments on 'Gaze of Athena'

your story was well written and it begs for more plzzz

carrie

oh yes my dear.. you understand so well.. please share more and more of this dynamic, this yearning on both of their parts.

Thank You now get back to writing.. NOW!

I enjoyed it. I thin you should continue. However I would suggest breaking it into smaller paragraphs for easier reading.

Awesome story, generic! Really, really want to see how it continues... please write more!

If I didn't know, I would of sworn you are native. The grammar and spelling were great, and there were few if any mistakes. You also have a far better vocabulary then most people I know.

As for the story itself, it was absolutely wonderful. Very well written, erotic, understandable, and begs to be finished. Please write more.

Usually, I am not into humiliation or spanking. Sex that does not happen between equals almost always turns me down. But this story has very believable charakters - and the feelings are well described.

But it is too sad to know from the beginning that its conclusion is suicide.

I appreciate your kind words as well as the constructive criticism and will work on avoiding those mistakes in part 2. I wish more people who didn't like it, would share their thoughts so I could try and improve my writing. I have received some requests/ideas for part 2 but more are always welcome.

needs more, great story