All Comments on 'Geek's BIG Break Ch. 02'

LMAO Gio going to get a work out. cant wait to see how this one plays out

For the HOT read you should have named the story (13 inches!!)😂

To have Gio basically have a harem of slave women worshipping him like a Sex God and giving him countless babies as he impregnates them time and time again.Oh and to have Tara and Tiffany ultimately dump and humiliate their ex-boyfriends Chris and Brock by video talking on their phones while getting fucked by Gio as retribution for bullying him all those years in school.Knowing their Girlfriends just majorly disrepected their manhoods for some Geek who outclassed their dumb jocked asses.

Now Mom and Fiona may be the exceptions and fuck him out of love and affection but Gio admittedly is lucky to have all those who will do anything to please him and vice versa.Bring on more.

I would suggest mum first then expand to say the prom queen and then his aunt and mum together

This is just a repost of Chapter One with a different title.👎

There was some quite funny bits in this story and was well worth the read. Looking forward to many more chapters. Keep up the good work.

Liked the story so far ....still knowing it's made up I would try not too knock every female up the first time spread it out a bit

You can't please everyone, but you're doing a fine job with this story so far. You can even include how the young women are so protective of Gio that they see to it that the jocks agree to not lay a hand on the new stud in school!

At any rate, this story must go on!

Just how many female students are there attending the school Gio goes to? Mr. Anderson may get more than he can handle too!

Hahahaha

Awaiting next chapter.....

Keep it to a small number fuck his mom and the girl he likes from school but no more than that please beside the loved the story

Need to proof read ! 13 inch not even close to believeable

There. are so many possibilities. Not to mention the jocks ass kicking. Well done

Just want to say thank you for letting us into your world of writing. As they say" Damn the torpedos,full steam ahead"... Can't wait for the next installment. Keep up the great work!!!

“ but at ten inches, he entered her throat and she started to gag.” What was she? A horse? Large headed women can take maybe 5-6” from lips to throath... i mean the story is really neat and i don’t have problems with large cocks fantasies but at some points you gotta keep it believable...

Cheers!!

Bullshit story and people even like this shit?

First off enjoyed the story was laughing at the twins, knew a couple twins who though there shit didn't stink. Next to Anonymous, back in the sixty's there was a priviate (sic) sex club called the King Dong club, you had to be at least 10" to be eligable (sic) to join. And every year they crowned the one with the biggest dong King. An Actor by the name of Milton Berel was crowned King several years running as it's King measuring in at well over 14". This was interview he gave Playboy

I have to be honest this was a far cry from the first part, too much slut this and slave that. Seriously, he's going to treat his sister the same as the twins? I was really looking forward to seeing more of mom but now I'm not so sure. He is still in high school and he wants to impregnate everyone, who is going to support all of these babies?

Good story keep up the good work hope to real more soon.

The biggest human penis ever recorded is 18+ inches so 13.75 isn't outside the realm of possibility.

keep going and see where it takes you

I really enjoyed parts of this and most of chapter 1. But you rushed the escalation of the plot to damn much. I can accept his 13 inch cock, orange sized balls, and even sex god level of skill with out any experience. There are issues though with the pacing, with how other than mentioning that the twins were blonde no other description of their physical attributes were given but we know his sister is a 24 C (34 C would be more physically possible). Your world building that you went to some lengths to establish in chapter 1 you ignored in your zeal for chapter 2. One twin was recorded fucking a dog? But Fiona was just sitting on this blackmail for no other reason? The twins and Fiona had screaming multiple orgasms but her father never once heard them while he was in the same house a floor away? Their father was totally accepting of his daughters being publicly degraded? The brainy nerd went from a nice guy to a dominant bully to everyone around him in the space of two or three hours? If the boy had this kind of back bone he wouldn't of been bullied this damn much. Giant ass guys he's lived in fear of for the last 3-6 years, fucks their girlfriends while facetiming them, bragging and escalating their rage... does he have an exit strategy of any kind? Since you went to great lengths to establish he can't physically defend himself from them or the rest of the football team. Can the twins really go from virgins to size queens so fast?

Flat out you need to proof read your work better and not be in such a rush. I hope you can salvage this.

I enjoyed this chapter keep up the good work but be careful with having the main character falling into the trappings of treating his family as just another hole in the harem that being said it is pretty good character development when we take into account how much he was tortured by everyone so this dramatic escalation is proportionate to his repressed rage at those who messed with him the only way the character could get ruined is if say another character made him a cuck like if mr anderson fucked the mom

Glad the stuck up cheerleaders got 13 inches stuck up. Beautifully written with realistic desires many possess, sister, cheerleaders, mother and of course 13 inches.

Nice reading...

But the same old big-dicked geek who will fuck up to a harem...

Too OTT for me. One thing to have a giant prick, but another yo be one.

...seriously.

The sex scenes are hot enough, yes.

Everything else?

Even if we forget your preemptive 'Don't read this if you don't want over-the-top fantasies and just ignore the unreality of this guy having a huge schwantz that NOBODY, including his mom and horny sister didn't notice...

Why did you make a 'nice guy' such a complete jaghole in no time at all? Do you HATE him?

Then...all the well-grounded fears he had suddenly won't come true because he had sex with popular twins? Actual writers call that a plothole.

The dad never heard his daughter's screaming, AND is going to be JUST FINE that his heretofore virgin daughters have been defiled because the kid can...DRAW?

There are the innumerable writing/grammar/spelling errors.

This isn't a text between teenagers at 3am. Have some pride for yourself and respect for your readers.

Much of this is lazy or rushed.

Editing both chapters so far would take 5 minutes, max.

Do better.

Story was good he didn't need a 13 3/4 inch dick and no girl is gonna say I'll be your slave and tell his sister im gonna put baby in you. Hes had a big dick his whole life he don't go from geek to Master of the Universe in couple hours bad job!!!

This wouldn't be so bad if you had set up some supernatural element as to way everyone was acting so fucked up and impossibly slutty.

Just adding sonething that suggested he had super pheromones or made a wish on something or anything other than all women just want a big dick.

...even if we readers ignore your disclaimer (which is basically just an excuse to be a lazy writer), there are a ton of other plot issues, editing mistakes, etc.

Your protagonist went from being a sympathetic character to at best an anti-hero in like five sentences. Why? Revenge plots are fine, but there is a line carefully tread in truly great stories of such. You ran over the line fast as possible, then turned around erased it, just to be sure.

No dad, even in a fantasy, is so easily played into his daughters (let alone 'virgin' daughters) turned into wanton hussies just because the kid can sketch good. The best of fantasy is to create situations the audience can relate to, even when the circumstances are extraordinary. Not where nothing is real, or even could be.

Which, by the way...the 'solution' of wearing dress pants would be WORSE than wearing jeans. Have you ever worn dress pants with a boner? Everybody that saw him could read his pulse in dress pants, with even a normal 'big dick', let alone the stupid-big one you gave him. For most women, 8 inches is very big, and 10 inches is a 'monster'. 14 inches?! 50-50 most women even go near it. THAT s maybe the bigger fantasy than his dick being so unnecessarily big.

None of these characters are developed...we can see why you wrote that 'disclaimer'. Everything is rushed! So, you KNEW it was riddled with problems, but instead of fixing them, you made up an excuse, like your dog eating your homework.

You might be satisfied with a mid-4 star rating, so, you know, cool then.

If you wanted a near-5 star rating, however, you should really address the issues people have with the story.

A true writer (or performer) is supposed to play to the audience.

History is rife with ego-centric creations being ignored by the masses.

Not sure why you are willingly angling for that should-be unsatisfying plateau.

Geez this was bad! Like, really reeeaaaalllly bad :(. Forget the disclaimer, lol. This story is so obviously written by some kid that's probably between 13"and 15 years old and has never even seen a real pussy, much less had sex. No clue about even hiding a normal sized hardon in a pair of pants, much less a big dick. I'd rather find some jeans that snugly hold my long, thick cock in place instead of wearing slacks and having my dick sliding around in my boxers and the end of my dick hanging out the leg of my boxers and rubbing against the slacks with every step! My dick would be straining against my pants leg in five minutes time!

Virgin girls? Learn what a hymen is and where it's located dude! Sheesh! ...and really, two cheerleaders with a bunch of football players and they are only giving up their asses? Like half of those guys with their over inflated egos wouldn't have just shoved it in their pussies anyway! Lol.

Worst of all though, which ruined the mood and story faster than if you'd walked up on stage while your pastor was preaching at church, and dropped your pants and took a shit, was when the fucktard's attitude and personality changed from meek, depressed and oppressed to sadistic Nazi dick-hypno rapist. It was disgusting to read and watch unfold. The worst was him basically shitting all over his sister, who just saved the pathetic loser's life! ...hell, fantasy world or not, even I would have known, say at fifteen, if I had a huge cock, that I could have easily been banging my mom's hot friends behind her back!! So he's basically retarded too!

Then let's throw out the fact that basically any high School girl that sees a dick over a foot long (hell, that would do it usually!) And too damned big to fit any condom over, would never let him get anywhere near her!!! ROFL!! Hell, half the porn chicks would tell him to take his pussy ruining dick and go home!

Total fail.

I don't see how anyone could say this story was good, it was total crap, going from meek geek to total asshole bully and even shitting on his sister who was helping him to get laid. the twins' father giving him an internship knowing the kid fucked his girls right under his nose and it was ok to do so, no father would allow that to happen and be happy about it. as for the 13 3/4" cock, most women would say oh hell no, you not even getting near my pussy with that. Also two girls letting the whole football team fuck them up the ass and sucking their cocks without losing their virginity, surely they would have lost it because they was sluts and the jocks would fuck their cunts whether they wanted it or not, how the girls going to stop a whole football team from raping them. women drooling over an oversized cock is not even believable just because it is huge, get real. sounds like a 12-year-old kid posted this crap.

I can think of two explanations for the popularity of this rubbish.

1). a horde of drooling imbeciles escaped from their padded cells and suddenly felt the urge to read.

2). underage or minor children (their brains aren’t fully developed until the age of 25) must have infiltrated this site and then one of the little buggers shared a link to this on social media.

Still fantasy but not liking the way he's switched from geek so fast and to being a bully himself. The plot's weak but it's a good read if you like the way the author's taking this story - the disclaimer says it all. No longer my cup of tea.

This is just shit.

Potential potentially wasted. Btw you may want to learn a little bit more anatomy (fantasy or not). I will use two nameless people I dated. One was 5'8 and the other was 5'2. The one who was 5'8 was unusually....narrow down there but was 'accommodating'. The other one who was 5'2 had 3 children and a 'daddy' stitch to match her extremely tiny frame. I almost couldn't have sex with her because even after a tantric session with her she was too small. No...I was not too big. She was just too small for me. I slowly stretched her open and eventually bottomed out in her. Now that I think about it I kind of miss that girl. Being so close to someone I could trust....the way her skin would get goosebumps when I touched her...Those cold winter nights that felt extra special having such a beautiful person cuddled against me...I remember starting by having her sit in front of me and her letting me massage her head and neck. She loved it when I would play with her hair. Then I would kiss her on the back of her neck and reach around to gently rub one of her nipples. She would lightly moan and lean her head back to rest on my shoulder. After that I would use my other hand to reach down and play with her clit...using her wetness against her as her breathing would intensify and her heartbeat became quite distinct against my hand on her silky smooth skin. I used to just enjoy nibbling on her ear and feel the heat radiating off of her as I would drive her over the edge. Each time she would try to break free to make a move on me would be halted as I would hold her tightly just to continue teasing her from behind. She would never actually scream but her whimpers, panting, and eventual pleadings were such a turn on for me. I miss those full moon summer nights where I would be in her bed...admiring those beautiful green eyes as the moonlight would shine down on her bed...partially illuminating her (to me) flawless body and golden hair....nose freckles and her shoulder birthmark. "Come closer" she would say in the most angelic voice. "I want to see you". She would wrap her arms and legs around me and pull me closer to her face. I miss locking eyes with her and that gentle gasp she would make as I would go as deep as she could handle. She would close her eyes and smile for a few seconds as her hips would sway...massaging me with the slightest of movements. Her eyes would slowly open just to look at what felt like my soul. All those times I would tease her lead to her hypnotic gaze piercing right through me. It was mesmerizing...almost magical how she could just hit a switch and go from being my sweet little plaything who's only purpose was to be on her knees and satisfy me whenever I wanted to an absolute goddess. She could force me on my knees and make me beg for her attention and her affection. But she never did. Maybe she was satisfied knowing that she could put me in a daze with those incredible, kind, and beautiful eyes. Not that it mattered. She left me for a woman a couple years later. Something about a pussy. Whether it was me or her new girlfriend I'll never know. ANYWAY I think you have potential for making good stories. I even added a true story of my own to show you that you can do better (aka I'm not a good writer nor have I ever actually written). It makes sense that his behavior could have become a bit more extreme but I feel like his demeanor torwards his sister would have realistically been more gentle. If these people were real I can see him having a genuine love and respect for her. Though the twins....yeah I probably would have acted that way too. His sister could have been his right hand...man? Wingman? Broski? Idk some sort of partner in sexual crimes. Alright, sexual crimes sounds fucked up but they would be a team on a sexual crusade....that might be wrong too. Fuck it I'm out.

This concept had so much potential but now it’s just plain garbage. Dad doesn’t even bat an eye about anything.

Wouldn't say garbage

ge exactly, but it certainly took a left turn at Albuquerque. That's not a good thing in this instance. 3*/5*

I think the story is OK, still reading through it, but felt I had to comment.

First, To all the other commenters....it is fantasy. That means that no one has to obey 'realism' or anything like that if the author doesn't want to, and they specifically stated in their disclaimer that this story is not for those who expect realism. As was once illustrated to me: "It's my story, if I want to land a Boeing 747 in a bathtub, I'll do it"

On to the content of the story:

I didn't really expect the 'big dick magic' when it happened, but now I realize that this is what the story is about. The women want his dick because he's fuckin huge. This isn't really an uncommon theme, but it's exaggerated here. I'm also a fan of breeding/insemination, but the way Gio kinda just instantly jumped into that...it felt like some kind of whiplash.

I don't really care for some of Gio's attitudes either. The twins are bully-sluts with jock boyfriends, I don't mind them being taken down a peg. I would have preferred him to be much nicer to his sister and keep her by his side as a loyal and willing fuck-buddy/lover. Something that would enable a more sensual and loving side of him to come out.

As I move onto the next section, I'm not expecting much from him with regards to his mother. His mom, from her final comment, is just another cum/cock-starved slut for this story, and I expect Gio to treat her the same as every other woman he's interacted with so far.

I like it. Look forward to see where you take us next

This is so incredibly funny, so erotically funny. Well done. I believe the author is a woman, if so she is probably rolling on the floor laughing after reading the comments. I may not continue this series but it's only because I was searching for a romance theme in this genre. If I do I will defiantly come back to it. I rate this part two 5 stars also. Thank you for submitting this.

Now you've turned the ridiculous dick dude into a BULLY.............

I don't like bullies...........only bullies like bullies.

suggest you change your style.

Amazing. I've never read pornograpgic satire, before. Well done! The story is both hot and hilarious. Definitely five stars.

13 Inch Dick Makes An Alpha Male! Great Story Definition@

Damn. The least realistic and sexiest part of this story has gotta be that internship.

First I wanna say is that I’m a fan of the work that I’ve read of yours so far. And that I am no critic I am just a guy that reads six stories on the website and it has eternal writers block myself.

That being said I like the set up for Geo and his background to a certain point although he did seem a little gullible about how much porn in the book he read and then didn’t realize how much he would be desirable he’d be and up with the length of his equipment.

Then his sister being protective of him was one thing but then pretty much jumping his bones of the first Ativan was a warning flag to me. But after she enacted her playing with the twins he went from sort of geeky fun brother character to a bullying asshole in the span of a blink.

When he told the twins and then eventually his sister that he was going to breed them that kind of took me out of the story because it didn’t seem to jive with his attitude before him and his sister had sex.

He just didn’t read is this kind of automatically alpha male type jerk who was more of a bully then the people that bully him. And I have a deep part of me as a person who grew up as a good person myself for what he was dealing with an economy that took me out of the story a great deal when he turned into one.

Now the whole bringing these three girls thing also seems a little out of the blue and kind of the antithesis of a teenage boy. Why would any teenager even if they do have a BBC. Big brother cock, want to be saddled with two children by two girls who started off the story hating him and one by his own sister that just stretches believability even for a silly sex story.

And now positive things descriptions of your sex acts are very well done taking you to the count the logistics of someone having a Lexington Steele size dick. Geo started off as a guy I can see myself hanging out with what he turned into in Chapter 2 just kind of rub me the wrong way.

The mom she’s all right milf be Milfing. And the twins dad he seems all right to.

Overall I’m liking the story and I’m hoping things improve in the next few chapters but I’m gonna keep reading your work and I want nothing more than you continue to put these sex stories out for us horn dogs to read.

this really devolved, fast...re-reading, thinking my 3 star should really have been a 2...big dick literally AND figuratively...

was great unstill he got too big heads was good, stopped after that.

"Gio added a second finger and brushed across her hymen rubbing it with each thrust making sure not to break it."

Yet another story perpetuating the commonly-held belief in the myth of an internal hymen. It particularly astounds me when it is written by a female author. Don't you know where your hymen is/was?

The hymen is at the ENTRANCE to the vagina, NOT somewhere inside.

If anything is inserted into the vagina, it has passed the hymen. Gio had a tongue and two fingers inside, meaning he had already broken through the hymen before his BFC had gotten anywhere near it. This lapse is especially egregious considering Gio is supposedly highly educated about sex and pleasing a woman. Surely he would have learned the basics about female genitalia.

To any authors considering writing stories concerning deflowering a virgin girl/woman, please educate yourself about the actual female anatomy, and stop perpetuating the myth of an internal hymen.

i love the twist and i dont care if you say her hymen is in her butt or mouth, a good read is a good read! thank you so much

Good job; thanks for sharing your work!

I enjoyed the first part, the sudden persona changes in characters, it might have been over the top a simple let them touch it mouth it then take pictures while they were playing then take it away, tell them that they have prove their wantoness, let Gio become the school stud to entire school. That of story happens more of as they moves on to college and careers the geeks and average. The hardest thing being is do away with the grief anger and anguish, he could be amazed and have difficulty dealing the sudden flood stud statist being overwhelmed by all the attention

l played sports I had difficulty dealing all of the attention. My issue was that I was slightly autistic the geek side was a driving force, it is the self identity, sports are fun, and very physically exhausting and it impairs my studies, plus trying to date, worrying about all the puberty sudden trying deal with the hormones sudden hardons all the misinformation about sex, and how it different with others. The stuff you learn over a span between 10 and 15 is nearly overwhelming for some. The whole education system is flawed. History Geography and Government should be combined math and science be together. Most 18 years old don't vote because they don't know what to vote for or how it will effect their lives. Keep writing. I look forward to reading your new stories

Pure comedy. Mom's a ho...

The Fact When I Read Some Stories And See Similar Situation's That Have Happened In My Life Always Cracks Me Up. Kinda Like Those Notices That Some Characters May Resemble People In Real Life And What Not. The Head Cheerleader Thing Happened To Me. My Parent's Had Invited Some Co-workers Over And I Didn't Realize It Was The Cheerleader Captain's Jess And Tess From My Highschool.

An Hour Before Dinner I Was Taking A Shower And Had Walked Out With Just My Towel. I Was Drying My Hair And Bumped Into Someone On My Way To My Room And My Towel Fell. I Was Shocked And The Person Gasped And I Ran Straight To My Room Without Even Knowing Who The Person Was. So Dinner Comes Around And I'm Picking At My Food Looking Down. I Glance Up And Look Over At The Twin's And The Look They Gave Back Couldn't Be Considered Anything Else But Those "Bedroom Fuck Me Eye's!" I Look Down Quickly And Ask To Leave Dinner Early For Not Feeling Well. So I Rush Away And Get To My Room. I'm Laying Down When Someone Comes In My Room And Without Looking I Tell Them (Thinking It's My Parent's) "I'm Fine Just A Little Sleep And I'll Be Fine!" Then A Soft Feminine Voice Say's. "Awww Did U Hear That He's Going To Sleep Early, And Here I Was Thinking Of Having Fun With Him Before Sleeping Together. It Sounds So Much Better That Way." Then Another One Pitches In

"I Know He's Not Sick, I Bumped Into Him Earlier He's Faking It." I Turned Around And Tess Covered My Mouth And Said She Saw Me Naked And Wanted To See It Again. So I Showed Her And We Ended Up Doing The Horizontal Tango Then Her Sister Joined In And After That Day I Ended Up Blazing Through The Cheerleading Squad In My School. Still To This Day If Ever Anyone Of Them Are Single And Need A Place To Stay I Have Em Over. And Occasionally We'll Do The Horizontal Tango. Hope Everyone Is Having An Amazing and Blessed Day

That went from 0 to 60 way too quickly, but I guess it's all silly fun.

Wow talking about 0-100mph in a few seconds. The story is just not believable. The main character going from a geek to alpha male and dominating his sister and two cheerleaders in 2 chapters does not seem realistic at all. Also the twin father literally giving into his daughter now suddenly being owned as slave to the main character just seem so rushed. Everything seems rushed and just not believe to the point were I am pausing my reading to wrap my head around how much is going on. I am not sure were this story goes from here.

This story needa a big dollop of willing suspension of disbelief. Once you have that, it's fun.

LOL

Too juvenile a story. Too far past improbable to be fun.

Bill S.

Needs more suspension of disbelief than I can manage.

Nonsense!

Hilarious fantasy. Thanks for these images. 5 stars. Now -- How is Gio going to take care of all the babies? Oh - I have never met a girl with a 10 inch deep mouth. Most can handle up to 5 and the last 2 go down their throats. Oh, and you usually run into a cervix at around 5 inches and can hurt the girl until she warms up if you jam it in. So be careful with that 14 inch cock. I have never been with a woman over five foot eight inches so maybe taller women have more room? Maybe a seven foot tall WNBA player? Gio can probably easily get pregnant women to let him help them get their birth canal ready for childbirth.

These stories really belong in the humor section.

Except they are less funny than kinda sad.

Funny how he came in such a short time from timid with low self-esteem to arrogant...

Why have him be such an arrogant jerk? Could have kept him human.

So Gio went from being a reasonably decent guy and became the exact type of a-hole he pissed and moaned about.

Cheer leader in high school who sucked plenty of dick and took it in the ass never had her pussy eaten? Was this in the 1800s.

Another of the many contradictions this story has, Gio only has to read something once and he remembers it all. So why did he read the heretofore unknown book of how to pleasure a woman over 500 times?

Nevermind that it was for a priest to give instructions to a groom.

Unless it's a gay marriage (guy/guy) this is dubious at best.

One star for me.

Pretty good story but no one has a 13 3/4" cock. Also he should have forced it in balls deep. I would have.

You pretty much ruin the story by also making him a complete jerk towards his sister who never was mean to him & loved him!

The cervix is on the top wall of the vagina. The vagina stretches beyond the cervix. The head of a big dick pushes the cervix up and continues. A small vagina reaches a limit of stretching. A 13 inch dick can still only go in as far as the vagina will stretch.

Fiona was a good sister to him.

You really shouldn't have done that.

Plus, You're making him into even worse of a human than those jocks.

Fuck em, sure (not great but sure)

Breed em? Nah.

Also,why does he have this weird sorta possessiveness that once he sticks his dick in a hole.

She belongs to him.

That's kinda childish imo

Chapter 1 had a lot of promise, but it just turned on a dime and turned into a pitiful incel's "dominant alpha" fantasy in chapter 2. To say I'm disappointed is an understatement.

Kinda ruined it. Chapter one had promise, this one took a left turn down a dark alleyway. Suggested reading: Senior Year Memories, Bosom Buddies, and Big Tits Club. MCs don’t have to be one dicks just because they have a big dick.

I've read this story a few times before. So I pretty much know what's going to happen. I recommend to you all who have posted comments continue to read. For you people who think that Geo will become a total a-hole douchebag you're wrong. He will show he has compassion and kindness. So I say again read on.

I did not care for it. Too unbelievable.