by ainu2
Unless this is a script, where instead of narrative there are directions (so clearly this is not a script), please write in the past tense.
I'd love to see a part two that develops the romance between your main character and the shot putter.
Please continue the story with Ellen & George, maybe a threesome with the Aunt :)
I would also like to see George add - develop another girl or two. He seems to be a great teacher!