by MrLobo
Ignore that. Just because a story does not start off with gratuitous sex does not mean it is in the wrong category. I think you have a great start and I can not wait to read more.
very good story can't wait to see where its going. and to the no-erotic comment, have you ever heard of plot building? lots of writers don't put sex in the first few chapters if you don't like it read something else. 5 stars
It was interesting and I look forward to the next
Chapter one just blew my socks off! That was awesome, update soon PLEASE!
As an avid reader I look forward to your next chapter. Brilliant beginning, great characterization and visualization. I could see the action in my head and actually care about the characters, I hope for a happy ending.
And ignore the people talking about this being in the wrong section. Its annoying to have a series posted in all sorts of different categories.
Keep up the good work and let this story develop. As it does let the chapters get longer. You have a very good story tellers way about you.
With a start like this we should get a great story.
I hope it's a finished story though.
Anonymous comments should be banned
A few years UNFINISHED stop now.
Don't bother.
A few years UNFINISHED stop now.
Don't bother