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AnonymousAnonymousabout 13 years ago
too much too fast

Too many characters/names introduced early in the story - give your readers a bit more time to identify/organize the people in the story.

Otherwise good, keep going :)

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 13 years ago

What?! Too many characters thrown in, not enough detail and the bitch "seduced" the douche husband with very little effort. And she is proud of it! Seriously one star if that!

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