by JazCullen
glad the downstairs rooms are soundproofed or that would have been a frustrating night for many....I still think Lily needs to punish him a bit and she needs to tame that dominant man side of him. Loretta was older and could tame her dad. My fear is her youth and relative innocence for her age will make it hard for her to keep his dominance at bay. She's given it back a bit though so I will keep faith in Lily. Surprisingly, I''m not worried about Andrei's reaction to Mac. What better mate than a man who has protected her and guided the Praetorians from when she was born? Will the darkness in him be abated too? Are his eyes changed permanantly or just in the heat of sex?
One question I have is how do they find the vamps willing to protect the Varcolac? Isn't the general consensus about them amongst vamps not that positive. The whole 'freak of nature' and children of were/vamp joinings being looked down on must be tough to overcome. When they apply to be in the Praetorians, do they know their charges will be the Varcolac? If a vamp can apply to be a Pratorian and it isn't a thing you get recruited for, then the general population is aware they exist? I thought they weren't, but I believe you mentioned Brandon applying to be one.
Great chapter!
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This was probably one of my fav chapters is not my overall fav in all your stories.
Loved it
jaz if i could i would give u a number of 100 percent and the page before this one touched my heart and soul and i could understand the feelings and the emotions in the story and i hope u keep writing stories like these ones and i give u more then 5 stars on every chapter and every page too
Jaz you keep making me speechless with your writing... that doesn't help me give you good review.. I've left leaving just the 5 starts.
I can't put into words how much I'm loving this saga, but the love scene between Mac and Lily was OMG AMAZING!! My favorite chapter so far! You've definately made my favorite authors list!
You have been stringing me along so skillfully that I only realized how skillfully and how LONG when you finally wrote that HOT love scene. They have both been hurting so bad for so long that, for me, it was your hottest love scene yet. Yeah there was old fashioned horny lusty sex there to consumate it, but it was truly a love scene.
You had me so excited I had to take a nitro just to keep reading (just kidding, but it was very nicely done :)
Okay, now I will just say the same dumb thing I always say -- you are a phenom and we are blessed that you share yourself with us so unstintingly. Thank you hun, Lynn
I loved the mating scene between Mac and Lily,one of the hottest so far! I love how he talks dirty to her even though she's a virgin. I've mostly been reading these stories for the story and not the sex,but this one got me off in a big way! Thanks :)
And i mean this in the best possible way ever.....finally Lily claimed her mate and the her mate stop fighting her :) it was so kinky....lolzz
xoxo
Aria
read the first 7 chapters on my tiny phone screen and treated myself with the 8th on a bigger screen! awesome! just thought i'd say thanks and say i'm enjoying your work very much :) now that is done, i'm going to finish Hearts of Warriors and continue to the your other pieces! Thanks again
I have loved all of your stories and characters, but i'm pretty sure lily and mac are my favorite couple that you've come up with..... So far at least :) keep up the great work!!
Your stories rock luv that you've jumped all the way to the kids. I soooooo HATE that you kept using SUGAR. This word every time I read it made it seem like a dirty old man was talking to her and that's she was 5 yrs old instead of a grown woman claiming her man. I know I haven't finished reading but goodness I'm gonna cringe every time I see the word sugar. All in all GREAT GREAT STORY!
Im breathless! i knew the fireworks would be out of this world.... All i can Say is Great JOB! i cant wait to read the next chapter... yes im staying awake so i can finish tonight :)
Love these stories. Have read the entire series a couple of times now. Can't wait for the next chapter :)
It makes me sigh when people read a story and don't read it properly. They miss so much when they skim it and then make fools of themselves by asking silly questions.
Rayne was guiding the children when they were younger in how to cope with using their abilities. She wasn't some all knowing expert on pack life, their pyschological make-up or anything else. She'd lived her entire life learning how to exist as a hybrid on her own. She could help in some ways but she was no expert. The children still have their own personalities to contend with which shapes who they become as adults.
And their parents are still their primary guardians and raise their families how they see fit. The entire pack wanted to protect the children from possible attack and rightly or wrongly they chose to keep them within the pack as the easiest way to do it.
As for the prior attack and just how powerful an Ancient is over all other vampires...well if you'd read all the stories you would see just how powerful an Ancient is. I have to wonder if your question about that relates more to the fact it was a female Ancient kicking ass. If it had been Andrei or Caleb or Demetri would you still be asking?
And again, with having read the stories properly you will have noted that NORS came to help Freya and he killed the third vampire so there were two Ancients involved.
Also Younglings and new Elders are so weak in strength they are easily killed. And there was the discussion about how the attack most likely came from European vampires and that they would take a long time to regroup from the primary incursion. Vampires live forever if not killed. 25 years is nothing to them to regroup and plan something else.
This is what I determined from reading all the stories properly. I didn't find it that hard.
I still have plot believability problems. WHERE WAS RAYNE FOR 25 YEARS?? Wasn't she tasked with guiding the hybrid children? More importantly, wouldn't she have alerted the pack to potential pitfalls with keeping the children caged within the compound? And the biggest problem I have with the plot...ONE attack in 25 years by a single elder and two younglings... ALL taken out by a single Ancient? How does such an occurrence facilitate resurrecting the Queen's elite guard?
I've been reading your stories and now I'm caught up which makes me very sad because now I have to wait. :( Hopefully a new chapter will be here soon!
... and that's just so far. I read your bio and must say that I hope all is back to normal for you soon. Not just for your us (your adoring fans lol) benefit but for yours as well. Take your time doing your thing... but pleeeeeease hurry taking your time! If that makes any sense to you. Please be well and stay warm Jaz.
Cannot imagine the kind of time it takes to create such beautiful work. So awaiting anxiously for the next instalment. You know you are amazing! Please come back soon!
ALWH is my favorite so far of all your stories! (this story coming in a close second!) The kind of raw emotion you drew out of us was simply beautiful. You made us laugh and you made us cry - rare to see a piece of fiction that you can truly get lost. I'm starting to think it's all real- this world of vampires and werewolves. We can see how much you have grown as a writer. Your stories have always been amazing but the newer generation of your work is simply kick ass!!
Can't wait for more from you-
Another jazz fanatic!
You had us holding our dicks, fingering our cunts and pinching our nipples for seven well written chapters. You must be one amazing lover yourself in real life because your Literotic foreplay was DAMN GOOD! Okay, this Peeping Tom recognizes your universe and now can go to sleep after reading all eight chapters straight to get to the hottest damn sex scene.... Yeah, you know your shit...you're better than good or great at this. I kinda want a book so that I can pull it out and read and touch it when I want..yeah...old school here. Anyway, it'll be a while before I check you out again. You're too damn addictive Jaz...I want my literotica quick and dirty as hell...your stories are a change but could be habit forming...and that's not what I'm into necessarily when I visit this site. You're in league with Laurel K. Hamilton, my all time favorite...even over Anne Rice. Keep up the EXCELLENT work, thanks for using this forum to try out your thoughts and mastery of this medium. YOU ROCK! Peeping Tom signing off....
This was a great read and I could not want away. I kept reading no matter what. The children are grown and stronger than anyone realizes. Lily has found her mate in a vampire. I just kept reading and loved what I read. It is sad there are not more kids, as Ceder wanted more, as I've read previously.
Why so late on the next chapter?
V. Cotton
This has got to your best storie yet.you are one of if not the best writer on this site......i cant wait for the next chapter in this storie and i cant wait for any other stories you may rite.
There has not been an update in a month...hope all is well with you. I noticed that you usually post every week so I was getting antsy and also worried. Hope all is well...
UPDATE! I really love this story and want to see what happens next.
I'm having immense withdrawals and am suffering irritability due to lack of chapter upload! Pls relieve me of these symptoms ASAP Jazcullen!
Moremoremoremoremore! This is such an addictive series! Loving every second keep up the amazing writing! b x
That was epic, all the teasing and denial finally adds up to the truth of how Mac feels about Lily. I can't wait for the next chapter...
Your an amazing author! Can wait for more. I find myself rushing home from work to check to see if another chapter is posted. The waiting is killing me! LOL
Got to the end of this story and then re-read the entire series AGAIN (for the 3rd time). WRITE FAST and please tell me that you will be writing the stories for the other hybrid's too. I LOVE the way you include all the previous stories characters in the newer stories. Without a doubt my favorite author!
i've reached the end....nooooooooooooo!!!!!!! i'll say it too....MORE PLEASE!
I adored this series and find myself wanting to know more of what with happen between Mac and Lily. It's very exciting to feel so attached to characters. :)
I have just finished reading through all of your stories and now I'm dying because I so want to read more but there is no more. You are really a talented writer. I really think you should publish your books :)
you are SUCH a talented writer!! I first read ALWH then realized there were more! i check everyday to see when you are gonna have this one finished!! The wait is DRIVING ME CRAZYYYY!
Love your stories!!! This was a wonderful chapter!! Thank you for FINALLY letting Mac and Lilly mate!!! Love you for your writing!!!!
Thanks again for being so wonderful!!!
I love all of your stories, they just keep getting better and better. Can't wait for the next installment.
That was your best chapter yet, them finally coming together was beautiful! I hope you update really soon! :D
Love all your stories! One of my favorite authors on this website, and I truly look forward to your posts. Thanks for all your great work!
You can just feel that something is going to go wrong. Can't wait to see what's next!
You just keep getting better and better!!! I can't wait to see what happens when they go to see the pack. I'm anxious to see how Andrei is going to react when he's faced with Lily's mate. I'm hoping he's going to be able to rise to the occasion and be the father Lily needs him to be right now!!! Your stories are the best by far!!!
..really, really, really, really loved it! Such a great chapter, and I am so excited by them going back home to face the music, and getting to find out more about the other 'kids'. And the best bit? They can each have their own story too, yay Jaz!!
You've done it again, Jaz; fantastic chapter and so enjoyable to read. You are definitely one of my favorite authors and I check every day for a new chapter - they are so addictive!
you are by far the best author on this site and i have become addicted to this series of stories! dont stop!
Once again you have proven that you're the best... only better!! :)
I have just read the entire series to this point. It is fantastic and you now have one more dedicated reader and fan.
Someone really needs to look into more stars. Awesome jaz can't wait for the next chapter. I love all of ur stories but this has to be the best so far. Keep up the good work.
...can relax now, as you could have cut the sexual tension with a knife.
life can go on, looking forward to the meeting between two headstrong male vampires.
mac is hot but still want my own gard!!
thanks jaz, another winner ;0)
OMG!!! All I can say about this chapter is I dont smoke but I need a cigarette!!!!! WHOA!!!! I hope it was good for everybody else because it sure as hell was good for me!!!!!! Next Chapter!!!!!!!
I've been a fan of yours for a while now but this is the first time I've been compelled to comment!
I love the way you developed the relationship between them both in the previous chapters for it to build up to this amazing scene between them which was just the right mix of tenderness and passion
I think you're a fantastic writer and I'm just a little bit in love with Mac now! :-)
P.S. Please please please don't make us wait too long for the next chapter. I'm dying to know what Andrei is going to make of his little girl being mated
Amazing stuff. Everything i hoped for their first time together. Loved it. So happy to see Mac accept what he is feeling instead of fighting it like so many would.
I've been dying, waiting for the moment when Mac and Lily got together!
As usual it was better than amything I could've imagined.
What a fantastic chapter (as they all are), it was beautiful to read and i could feel the emotions of Mac and Lily.
Am hoping chapter 9 is soon to be here :)
Well Done.
I am so loving this story. Can't wait for the next chapter!
so am loving this lol. i know you have heard it a lot of time but dam girl you are one good writer
...What can I say that hasn't already been said? Mac being the vulnerable one this time was just one of those 'aaawwww' moments. Andrei finally realizing the hold he has on his children's lives was something I feel was long in the coming. But now I like that he is willing to let go for Lily's happiness. Now back to Mac... the moment he said 'please' I would have melted into his arms. For such a bad ass to have been rendered as soft and full of emotion as he was when he finally accepted Lily, I think attests to how much he really loves her.
Now that Lily has found her mate. I would love to see who Kal has for a mate. Waiting patiently.
-392OhMyGoodness
Love your work. Hearts of Warriors is no different. I love seeing how u develop the characters of the Varcolac. Looking forward to chapter 9:)
So so so amazing... been for this for what feels like forever. I don't know how you do it, but this story really resonates. I love that you changed things up a little bit, Mac and Lily have a very 'modern' passion, and you convey the full depth of the passion in the sex scenes without being crass or using silly euphemisms. I love too how the story ties back into the history of the varcolac. I can't wait to see how Mac and Lily's father get along. Can we see more of Lily's wolf?
This is a match made in vampire/ware heaven. I am in love with Mac and Lillie. Their personalities work so well with each other its breath taking! Job well done author, mine!
I loved this chapter and it was too hot for words :D
Maybe one day you can explore the other characters of the "V" group.
Im really interested in Liam's perspective.
Thank you for continuing with this awesome series.
This chapter was absolutely fan-f'ing-tastic, Jaz!!! I loved it and all of your other stories you have written!!! Thank you and I'm looking forward to the next chapter!! :)
seriously, your stories may be the best i've read. but this one. this one takes the cake. my goodness! please, please, please, keep them coming. and coming!
I WANT MY OWN MAC!!!!!!!!! Just reading the hot sex had my toes curling!!!!!
I'm happy that they talk and work things out, and I can't wait for the next chapter.
i really think that was the best chapter so far. your language and descriptions seemed so much better and i love it! keep up the amazing work! can't wait for the next chapter!
Damn,where can I get my own Mac??? Hehehe
Once again, amazing! Eagerly awaiting next chapter..confrontation with Andrei! Exciting!
The long, sustained build to this moment paid off big time. Carnal excellence in a multi-species meld.
Yum!
This is my favorite chapter by far... I cant wait to read what happens next.
Beautiful! Never long enough;). Together Lily and Mac can take the world on. Daddy will be no problem Lily has him wrapped around her little finger, he won't be a push over esp for Mac but he loves his daughter dearly. Thank you for your time and sharing your creativity with us.
I can't wait for the next chapter to come out! Loved the way you wrote this one, their first time was perfect. Write fast please!
Lily inheriting the worst from Andrei, Mac having to come back and babysit Lily, Lily threatening to leave, Mac finally realizing how deep his love for Lily really is. No the place to start is after all of that.
When Lily and Mac were finally behind closed doors. The true beauty of Lily and Mac coming together is that they stayed true to character. You showed the beauty of discovery and also the deep need these two had for one another. It could not have been written any better.
Jaz this is by far one of the best chapters you have written. I wish I could vote more than once because 5 stars are not enough!!!
I'm in awe of your superb narration skills and story telling ability.you are the best........
Nobody beats you in this category.....
As usual nothing short of a masterpiece. Can't wait til she brings him home to daddy. Thanks for another sleepless night, it was well worth it ;-D
Just Beautiful, raw, intense, emotional. Love your storytelling, always have. Thank you for sharing your gift with us. AWSOME!
You wrote their first time together perfectly. It was so emotion filled and just raw love that it jumped out at me. Damn and it was bloody HOT too! I'm glad you didn't rush Mac, acceptance of the mating. The way it happened seemed natural and the next logical step. Amazing chapter!
your killing me jaz in the best way possible and i love every minute of it...
As always this chapter was wonderful and of course I just cannot wait until the next one. I wonder what's instore for the rest of the crew...