All Comments on 'Heaven Only Knows Ch. 01'

Nice start and well written. Looking forward to the next chapter. Hope the story continues from the barn. No need to jump directly from the past to the present is there? Consider that my selfish plea for additional stories and thanks for this one.

There's a great story rising here! But I hate to see a fine story marred by typos and a few misused words, where an editor could help. So Ron, I hope you will engage one, as this writing is far from hopeless, actually quite good, hot, and promising.

And what, no tags? I suggest 'MF oral seduc tease'.

Ah, what is a "mustered gold carpet?"

"my turned"

please....