All Comments on 'Hello, Goodbye'

I think I need a cold shower...

~MDA~

Wow! That is a really hot story. I enjoyed the character development, the initial hesitation, the dialogue; they combined to make the story plausible which makes it even more erotic! You said you welcome feedback of all types, so I will say that I was a bit distracted by a few spelling errors ("you're" that should have been "your," for example) and the consistent punctuation error in your dialogue. You need a comma between the last word spoken and the quotation marks. "These are the words the character is speaking," said the author. I know it sounds very nitpicky, but I notice these things. Otherwise, VERY hot and please, please share another story with us soon!

This sounds like it was written by a man who thinks he knows what women want. You lost me with the dialogue.

Stupid stupid stupid. One of the commentators said it correctly. This was probably written by an ignorant (my words) man. Sheesh. What drivel.

His mother must have punished him this morning and made him cum in a shot galls and then fed him his breakfasst.

Why must some people who probably don't know one end of a pen from the other always complain when they perceive [rightly or wrongly] that a man is writing about the sexual feelings and experiences of women? Do these people think creative writing should only be based on actual personal experience? If so, would we have Star Trek? Would D.H.Lawrence ever have given us Lady Chatterly's Lover? Or Jane Austin given us that delicious description of the trials and tribulations of Mr Darcy? What would Robert Graves know about the experiences of the emperor Claudius? Would a white man be wrong to write about Africans? What does a 25-yr-old woman know about the sexual feelings and desires of an elderly man? Should she be forbidden to write about them? This kind of totalitarian thinking ['Thinking'? No - more like knee-jerk responses with no mental input whatever, such people being too well potty-trained to think for themselves] would have us all being totally introverted and devoid of imaginative creativity. You don't have to like what people write, but the least you can do is be grateful that they are writing at all, and doing so to entertain you and me, instead of spitting out these spiteful little jabs at folks who are working their guts out for our benefit. Freddy

Strictly male masturbation porn. I guess it has it's place in here.