All Comments on 'Helplessness Blues'

You were correct in saying the characters are just a little 1-dimensional, but it is a very nice read. With more development, I would give it a 5.

As I said a very unique story -written with believable characters and a different story plot for a nice change -- I would not mind reading a continuation story at all - Thanks

YAWN, I gave up half way down the first page.

A good, well crafted story with excellent spelling and grammar. Character depth will come with practice.

Well done.

so he is the validictorian of his class and when he wakes up drugged in the field he is not smart enough to go to the hospital to get a drug test? when he sees the pix and the twins tell him what happened he still doesnt go?no wonder these 2 felt sorry for him.

To redlion, it's funny because that's a really good point. I won't claim that I ever particularly pulled the logic of this story together.

Good story. People do not always (even usually) act logically: it's what makes fiction entertaining. As long as characters and the plot are not unreal, variety is the spice of life!

I like tales that develop slowly, and this one fills the bill.

You wove a great tale. Very Descriptive and detailed.. Good Read and well written.

Not to my liking.

A VERY ENJOYABLE STORY TOLD IN A VERY PLAIN PASSIONATE LANGUAGE.

REALLY ENJOYED.

The way this story is told is really quite different. It's more like a Statement or something written to a magazine. As such it is quite refreshing to see it on Lit..

I really enjoyed it.

73

HP

I really like your style. I commented yesterday about the one with Kitty and though I liked the story I wasn't a fan of tattoos... with this one I am both a fan of the story telling plus I really like the personalities and even the relationship and whole revenge thing... I was a little apprehensive about the start with the abuse background but got past that as the story continued. I think I expected more resolution at the end but actually was quite happy that you didn't wrap it all up nicely for us. I definitely am intrigued to read your other stories even if they haven't been rated as highly as the ones I have already read. I like that you don't always use the same style, for example it was nice that Kitty would interject into the story but you don't feature that gimmick every time. Look forward to more stories. Thanks!

Loved the three bastards getting there asses hand to them. On another note where can I find a Lucia for my own

engaging & interesting

well written ,

xxxhugsxxx

the poor wimp got raped, why didn't the police get called? two sorry cunts who raped him were in charge of rehab???

It's a fucking drugging and a rape. What's romantic, fucking two of the skank rapist? the twins are PURE sluts, you CANNOT get passed around the team UNLESS you want it. about 20 of the people in this story should have long prison sentences including the skank twins. Valedictorian of what kiddy garden? 1*

I thought you did a pretty decent job with this. Any chance you have more to share?

...I lost the will by the end of page 2.

Ploy is ok with me if they are identical twins since identical twins are into sharing everything! How could you pick one over the other. Only thing better would be identical triplets, lol.

But it isn't believable. The twins were too miserable. Where is their father? He will kill all of them.

Eh, just not believable in anyway... SO a "fat loser" is humiliated at a party for some reason, the twin cheerleaders are also humiliated for some reason, and then the MC lucks into beating up three guys and the cheerleaders (who have no friends or family who will stand up for them) become his lovers. Nah, just nah.

Nice, just need more. Story could go in several different directions but just make sure of happy ending! If we want reality we can look in the mirror. Thank you, I loved it.