by eroticyates
An engaging, believable story.
Lack of punctuation didn't bother me.
Sorry about the puncuation. I wrote it on my phone. I will definately be more punctual in the future. And thank you for your commments.
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C j
If you cannot be bothered to properly indicate speech and follow basic English grammar, do not expect anyone to be bothered reading your work.
with believable emotion, tension, suspense. May I suggest the modern literary "cool" of no quotation marks really doesn't work. Writing is a visual experience for the reader, and not only imaginative visual. Dispensing with quotation marks has a way of detaching the characters, making their speech as sterile as mathmatical symbols.
He should of got one free 'get out of jail card' before he forgave her ...