by m_storyman_x
What an emotional roller-coaster. Fantastic writing and story development. I loved every chapter and could not stop reading it after chapter 4. Excellent work. One of my favorites on this site.
Good story. But it's sad we never know what Mandy's mom gave birth to son or daughter and we never find out what Mandy was carrying a son or daughter and if mandy's ex husband in California had hair or eye color the same as David's and we never found out if Betsy had the same eye or hair color as Mandy if David's son and Mandy's daughter look like like David and Mandy then people will think David and Mandy has 3 babies. Sad thst Mandy's parents are trouble in their marriage. But i really did enjoyed this story. Hope your next one is as good as this one
I agree there was some hippocracy and double standards. At times it was difficult to follow the main character's (or the author's) train of thought.
That being said it was still a good series to read. Something that was done quite well was the morphing of the ...genre...??... the general feel of the story - Started as light hearted teen fucking all his fantasies to slightly more serious college relationships to even more serious mid life.... all the while screwing as many people as possible. Good job
Just disappointing. If this series was a plane flight, it started developing engine trouble around chapter 15 and crashed and burned with the epilogue. Even the number of comments have gone steadily downhill as the chapters progressed. The sex scenes became repetitive and the author's over use of "vaginal tunnels" and "vaginal depths" as opposed to other synonyms (vagina, pussy, cunt ...) began to feel like a bunch of cut and paste. In the end, the main character showed that he was just another horndog like all the other men with perhaps an above average size cock and highly skilled at cunnilingus. And all other male characters were simply inferior. The cast of characters grew so large, I quit caring who was the current pussy du jour - not even sure who the last Tina characters was?
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So many incomplete story lines. Little or no real romance. NO details about Mandy's husband and marriage. Patty and her family. Peggy Johnson (principal) and her sister?
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The epilogue was just the final stake through the heart of the tale. Finally, David realized how much he really loved Betsy and now is "stuck" with Mandy. And the swapping and swinging goes on. David is reduced to being a literal Motherf*cker with 3 kids from different mothers and everyone thinks it's now hunky-dory, even apparently Mandy after protesting so much in earlier chapters that she would not want to have David raise her child by another man.
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A fantasy of f*cking I suppose but ultimately the series just crashed an burned with an overabundance of sex scenes and an under-abundance of character development and details.