All Comments on 'Holiday Weekend'

Very good first story. I will be watching out for more from you.

Wonderful sexual exploration, well written except for some typos, homophones, etc. Were you using voice dictation software? The work would benefit from a good proof-read, most likely from an outside editor, fresh, reading what he/she sees rather than knowing what you intended! Examples:

caters to a young, collage-aged crowd. ==> college-aged crowd ...

Her enormous breasts were visible, have covered in water ==> half covered in water ...

I could see ever one of her beautiful curves. ==> see every one. ...

I pushed by cock against her pussy lips from behind. ==> I pushed my cock ...

But, I was able to keel under control ==> to keep under control ...

Please keep writing! We enjoyed your work!

I found it a bit long.... I was wound up before page two. It was good though. I only wish I knew if it was real!

If so, yu are a lucky guy and I wish I were one of the girls!

Aside from a typo or two, it was a lot of fun to read. The humor was key!

Aside from a typo or two, it was a lot of fun to read. The humor was key!

Though I imagine it was a work of fantasy, your story felt very real, and seemed quite plausible to me, which goes a long way. The pacing was great, you could tell where things were headed, but got there exactly when I wanted you to.

Good work!

what happened the rest of the weekend?

Thanks for the great story , gave my g/f and I great ideas for our next date with a hot lady ;-)

that was unfucking believable. holy crap... i just came with them. and you say these situations were really part of your past... hott damn

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