All Comments on 'Home On Leave'

Who was Sal? In the second paragraph his name was Jayson. I still though it was a good story but I would have liked it to be a little longer.

I, too, was confused at the change of names and scrolled back to see. That interrupted the flow badly. Otherwise, pretty good.

Well, the story has potential, but you really need an editor. At the beginning I was confused, whether it was her brother coming home or who this guy was. And she seems way too experienced for a virgin. Plus, there are a lot of minor mistakes in it (like how can she look and whisper at him, after falling asleep). But all in all, a nice story.