by Lavidian
But the end was a little rushed. Also the epilogue was too short, and not well defined enough for me. I believe that you should do a follow up to this story..... You know that Grant won't just leave them be.....
@Lo Pan = Grant disowned them both in public. The epilogue was not to short in my opinion either.
That aside, I would love to see a new spin off based around this. Featuring Daphne and Jon. As I do feel like they both got the rough end of character development.
Great story. Thanks a lot for your effort and keep up the great work. ^__^
It made the story seem very formulaic.
I was surprised to see you were Canadian because I got the feeling through the whole piece that English was your second language.
Still, not bad.
thanks for the story.. and fuck off to the english teachers on this site just enjoy the story dicks
I hope you find the interest to continue the journey.
Grandchildren are blessings and to find out what Jon and Daphne have done would be a fantastic continuation.
Thank you for the fine tale.
This series was amazing! So many twists and turns, interesting characters and sub-plots, steamy hot sex scenes, and (a must for me) a happy ending! Please continue to write! <3
Amazing story. I'd like to see it as a short film something :)
This is one of the best stories I have read on this site. After ch. 3 I was skipping over the sex for the plot. I would love to see more from you.
great story-I liked each installment, even though I didn't comment on each one-knowing there was a next part to read-really well done story, good plot, good twists and turns, great sex scenes; I didn't count on a fairy tale ending, but was pleasantly surprised by it [they deserved it] good job, thanks
Enjoyed this all the way through. Wasn't expecting the twist in the story where Courtney did a runner Back to Daddy, but you explained it perfectly. Good ending though.
Can we have more well written stories from you please
People recovering from a horrifically traumatic experience such as theirs and finally re-united are only thinking one thing, lots of alone time with each other to reconnect and re-bond with each other. Not jumping into a multi partner sex fest on the same day as their reunion. That scene was totally not necessary, was gratuitous and had no context to back up inserting it at that point in the story. It follows time and again that any great incest romance story has always succeeded without the addition of multi-partners in the mix. Only one comes to mind that did do really well was, My Sister's Deception. Those encounters were written with care, in context with the rest of the story and spread tastefully throughout the whole story. This was one surprise blurp, inserted tastelessly in a rush to titillate and disrupted the flow of the reunion/ recovery/ bonding experience for the two protagonists. I'm sorry but it was enough to sour me on the whole chapter. Voted a 1
One star.complete nonsense.shame had vested time into reading this only for it to end badly.Absolutely no need for the other person very disappointed
What a wonderful and brilliantly written story. My only complaint is not knowing what actually happened at the mall besides the hint that he saved her from thieves. 5 stars all the way.
Epic story worthy of the hall of fame. Fantastic ending. Well done author.
This is an amazing story. I know its on the old side but holy crap this is good. I really hope your still writing under a different name or professionally.
So, obviously Derick and Courtney lived happily ever after, and Jon and Daphne did too in the same city, but where did Victor and Jesse end up?
Loved it up until Jon got with Courtney also ended abruptly once they arrived in Florida