All Comments on 'Homelands Pt. 03 Ch. 02'

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Anonymousover 12 years ago

I like your story but....

This one left me totally scratching my head. You have a tendency to jump around in your storytelling which I have been able to follow for the most part but this jump was too big skipping over too much, at least for my taste. Too many questions about what happened at the end of the last chapter went totally unanswered in this chapter.

Anonymousover 12 years ago

agreed,

Too much in between missing.

Anonymousover 12 years ago

Great!!!

This continues to be a great story, but I was hoping to hear about the rest of the fight with the demon and the visit to Lily's family. I think I can put the threads together but it would have added to the story. AnHoa Rifleman

digdaddyrich over 12 years ago

I'm just a little confused

What the hell happened to get Frank banished to a tree house?

jdnunyer over 12 years agoAuthor

The revised version has now been posted.

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