by portofmanteau
You show definite promise as a writer of pornography.
This first story may have been a bit unrealistic but then erotica is fantasy and not necessarily realistic.
Keep writing. You have talent, Develop it.
It's ok if it was a little unrealistic. These are all fantasies anyway!
I thik your next chapter should be abt her giving birth and how her father supports her and watches her go thru the process. A lot of people write about the pregnancy and then write about the baby. They don't focus enough on the birth process.
Did I miss something?
I LOVED IT!
Please continue the story :-)
I agree with the previous writer, an 8"-er won't go into a lady with twins. Would have been more realilistic if the Daddy had just done oral and fingering to get her to cum and thus deliver the babies.
I did like the flow of the story. It developed nicely.
Thank You!
there were a few errors, such as "synch" instead of "cinch", but full penetration with an 8" penis when ready to deliver is impossible- do some research.
Loved reading this story, hope you will continue this story.