by Sean Renaud
Better than most. Believable plot, dialogue a little stilted, main character could use more development.
Like the piece. Keep writing.
Have found the majority of posting 'by Anonymous' signers to be vile little utterances without a shred of merit.
This one is the exception to the rule as it's to late for me to jack with registering.
It is funny, simple, straight to the point and it is a good basis for ch. 2