All Comments on 'How I Took My Brother'

Should really have been in non-consential/reluctant. As that is the key plot point of the story. Personally not my kind of thing, but may appeal more to people who like more 'rape-esque' stories.

I wonder what she will do with rick? I wonder if a DP is in the works? Pregnant? Wil she lactate? I can only find out if you write more :)

I like a story where the girl makes the guys give up control. You guys are nuts if you didn't like it. You better write another one. I wanna know what happens with Rick! Is she going to have sex with rick? Is jay gonna have sex with rick? Hurry up and write another!

...where's this going next?

I had feeling if there was drugs involved she used to mentally to make him do things...so mind control necessary.

What happens to Lizzie and Rick?

This story sets fire on Hell.

Lizzie is definitely one manipulative, twisted minded b*tch but her drive and determination was a huge turn on. Good story. Disturbing but good.

If this happened what I'd do to see that video!

Good one .....good for her...i bet I know where there from ...lol and itd not down south.but up north like say MN....

This is one twisted sick bitch, and I bet that she leave with the bestfriend of the brother, cause he wanted some of her.

Wrong & nice- all at once.

incest trumps non consentual in most people's minds as most taboo.

This is the exact reason why I've suggested to this site that they should allow 3 tags for category. The act of sex rarely falls into one category.

It could have been alot longer & more in-depth. Like talk about the morning after. I think a re-rite would be the thing to do because the premise is good but not the execution.

More please

smelled of bounce and masculine skin (Bounce)

Lizzie's college graduation . . . in a few days when she turned 19 ???

(-S) (s)tudent(-s) (-C) (c)ouncil (-P) (p)resident, (-B) (b)asketball star, (-P) (p)rom (-K) (k)ing

(-B) (b)rother

smile that (much) more devilish

The hostilities she hurdled towards him (hurled)

she heard the front door closed (close)

remembered working (the) cash (register) at the convenience store

her own arousal started (-to take place)

she knows better then to interfere (than)

Lizzie ducked behind the suit jacked (jacket)

To her (Lizzie’s) surprise, (-she) (the blonde) didn't even realize

She's an ugly old Bitch (bitch)

Man, your nasty!" (you’re)

Getting Lindsey (Lizzie) something for her birthday

I am just gonna run to Wally world (World)

My parents are leaving under the pretension that I am having a party (pretense)

Leaving her and Jay alone (-in wait of) (waiting for) their party guests

milling about sipping alcohol beverages (alcoholic)

$200 FOR TWO PILLS???????

Lizzie grounded up the tablets (ground)

poured them into their respective drinks, making sure (-it) (they) dissolved.

She (-traveled) (went) downstairs

drawing her tongue against his in a sensual dual (duel)

diving headfirst into her overhead pussy (?????)

you graduate college at 22. 19 if you are some kind of genius, so bro is a senior with a year to finish. this story begs stupid...

bro is a scum of the earth man whore and sis want to make money on the streets and needs a pimp (bro?)

Why would she want a scum of the earth man whore? He showed her ZERO respect. I just don't get it...

CHILD who is so demented thinks the world cannot exist without drugs, even when "typing" what was suppose to be a story.

Sorry, couldn't finish. Was bugged by the references to her graduating college, but she just turned 19. Yeah, even at 21, not many finish college. So, the whole story was ruined by inconsistencies and impossibilities. From the other comments, didn't miss much. Proofreading!

Dumped almost immediately. College grad at 19 and bro was 21??? Are you on drugs author??? Or just too stupid to walk around unsupervised?

You need an editor.

Apparently you were on LSD and MaryJane when you wrote this.......

What a grotesque story and total morons as the mc. Bet the writer is just as ignorant.