All Comments on 'How To Keep Your Daughter Safe'
by Giln
- 13 Comments
Anonymousover 16 years agoWhoa nelly! This thing was too quick. It was over before it began.
Anonymousover 16 years agoI just wish I knew who "Peter" was. Proofreading makes all the difference, especially if names are changed between drafts.
Anonymousover 16 years agoWith only 3 characters in such a short abrupt and unerotic story surely you could at least keep their names consistent!
Anonymousover 16 years agowell good on the mom.nice short story okay names got mixed up but hey <grins>
Anonymousover 16 years agoYour stories will be longer if you jerk off before writing them instead of during.
Anonymousover 16 years agoHis hot cum filled "his" mouth? Was this a gay story and I missed something? I must have, because I have no idea who the fuck Peter is. Also MUCH too short, with no anticipation for the reader. Some were meant to write, you were meant to read.
Anonymousover 16 years agoPoorly written ans nonsensical. You start out in Michael's head, then shift to Carmen, then Carly (never mind Perter!). None of these characters is more than a name and a relationship. If Carly expects a 6:30 blowjob to 'protect' her daughter, she is a fool. For a teenager, this will just ensure that he might last a bit longer when the main event arrives. I can just imiagine Carmen's reaction when he says, Gee, you give much better head than your Mom, she was in such a hurry!"
Anonymousover 16 years agoThe mother let him know she know's what he tastes like all by himself, and he better taste the same later that night- meaning no pussy taste mixed in, leaving the daughter a virgin at the end of the date.
SWUS80over 16 years agoYour story really turned me on, and left me wanting so much more. I love the concept, very original. I went looking for other similar stories, but only found one or two. Please make a sequel.
Anonymousalmost 16 years agoWell this story was way too short and not consistent when it came to the names. What was the mom doing blowing her daughter's date? That was really strange.
Anonymousover 15 years agoGreat story ! What would Mom do if she tastes pussy juice on his cock ? What if your daughter's boyfriend fucked your daughter up the ass ? How would Mom react to tasting that ?
Anonymousalmost 13 years agoI would like to hear what happens bewteen Michael and Carmen
