All Comments on 'Hush My Love Ch. 01'

You are adorable. "Yes you can help me by kissing me, I thought." What a refreshing writer. Please continue your tale of seduction.

You are adorable. "Yes you can help me by kissing me, I thought." What a refreshing writer. Please continue your tale of seduction.

It barely introduced the idea of the story. I'd echo the previous comment too.

There's lots of potential in this story. There are some writing errors, though. ("That made a few people cracked a smile." Indeed, there is something wrong with that sentence.) Overall, not bad; nothing that a cold re-read or another pair of eyes couldn't resolve. Keep writing.

-- KK in Texas