by JMaxwell69
Did not like it, story seemed to focus more on the mindset of the girl, and basically sucked overall.
Sorry to say, while your spelling and grammar are excellent, I did not enjoy the story. But then that part's more about personal taste...as such, there's no point in pointing out the things about it that made me want to hit my head against the wall. All I can say is the writing has quality, the story I hated, but someone out there will probably like it, because...well, taking into account how many people are out there, that's just how it works.
In truth, I didn't really like the story, much. It's well-written, but difficult to honestly enjoy. Rating it was difficult; I gave it a "4".
So it's something of a mixed bag. It doesn't have much in the way of writing flaws; it's just very unusual.