All Comments on 'I'll Show You Mine If... Ch. 01'

normally i don't read incest stories but for some reason i read this one...it was a real tease...loved it.

Nice stroy however, the last two paragraphs truely capture the inner feelings of love both characters seem to have for one another. Up until that point, it was just another sibling story of inquisitive youth discovering the opposite sex. But, you captured it. You nailed it. Looking forward to continuation of this story/discovery.

Thank you

What a great story!

Well thought out and provokative story line.

I can't wait to read more. This story has endless possibilities.

Please continue to write many many more chapters.

Thank you.

and simply provocative. Nicely done. I loved it. Hurry along with its continuation.

I was a little disappointed that he didn't kiss her belly, and lick her pussy lips. I wish he would have at least, kissed her mouth and revealed to her that he loved her. The writing was so sweet, and how the whole scene was set up was fantastic. Without saying, the main characters were very real, and I was wanting them to consummate their love, Hopefully in the next chapter that will happen. I'm very excited about the coming chapter (didn't mean it to be a pun). Thank You very much for the wonderful loving story....Rich

Amazing. Simply amazing. I can't really think of anything else to say.

Truly an amzing discovery of love and sensuality. One of the best I have read in quite some time.

I only want to thank you for your efforts on this , i`ve enjoyed your stories for some time now, keep up the great work ,for i know when i see a new entry from MANY FEATHERS it will be great , thx nathan in ga.

The most erotic chapter I have ever read in this genre. Powerful writing.

you ramble on telling the story but don't give any ages and most of it was totally unrealistic as bad as this chapter was it's not worth reading the rest

With so many stepchildren today, it is likely this sort of thing happens frequently. Nice story, and very descriptive.

It's gonna take me a Lot of "research"... to enjoy, uh, "check" the rest of your writings!... So many stories, and so highly regarded.... (if Mom ask's,)... tell her I'm doing 'research', on the internet, for biological/physiological inter-personal relations, for my Doctoral Thesis of "World Peace, Through Common Beliefs"...(!!)... (How's that, for an uneducated white boy from the farm?!).... But Really now... If I could have, would have, had That much insight, and sensitivity,...Then... I could be the semi-retired Gigolo, that I joke about being now!..HA!...

Awesome! Thanks for writing a great story. I have to read the rest of the series. It was very descriptive, had great dialogue, and was totally believable. Keep writing!

hmm......good.......she is damn naughty

she is a hot little minx, lucky bugger

The way you built this up and held me 'till the end..of the beginning....!...UMMMMMMMMM

Man that was great love the way u bulit it up can"t wait for more hurry up and get a nutter one out there

nice. look forward to reading the volumes of work you've done heer this story was 5 star ch 1-8

A good story line and good development ... With lots of places to go ... I'll definitely read some more of your writing

What was really a good story was spoiled by incorrect and overuse of commas. The general rule is that, if you remove the words within pairs of commas, the sentence still makes sense.

Too drawn out.

Great build up. I will be checking out some more of your work.

I wonder if this is why my brother wants me go plaes with him even parties and things will chat im beckydavis313@yahoo.com you think my brother interested in more than me being his sister

Wow, so very hot!

Loved the story, well done.