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AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
Make up your mind

Several different times you give us some piece of information then two sentences later the exact opposite: "the gargoyle's cock was MUCH larger-" "Fortunately, his cock wasn't much larger" or "I'm gonna lose my anal virginity" -"the head went in much easier than my ex's". A couple nice ideas, but this kind of randomness makes it unreadable.

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
I agree

I agree with the first commentor. You do have some wonderful ideas though!

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
Foggy

A couple of good ideas here, but not written well enough to do them justice.

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I wrote a fair amount of smut when I was younger and relatively inexperienced (see the 2011-2012 stuff). I'm back at it and hoping to put out better stories for your pleasure. I always welcome feedback, particularly if it's constructive criticism!