All Comments on 'In the Theater'

My wife loves sucking me off,she'll do it anywhere I want,sometimes I let her stay dressed and sometimes I make her strip off first.

It wasn't clear who's narrating this. Also it needs a bit more meat. More detailed descriptions would be nice. Pacing was a bit on the fast side

There were no glaring English (grammar or spelling) errors that a lot of first time authors have, you kept it moving, nice ending ... leave 'em wanting more. My only suggestion is to make it a bit more clear who is talking, at times both characters were saying "you ...".

All in all a very good start, I hope to see more.

As one drunken sailor to another - outstanding job!

Sexy, to the point, well written story. Excellent start to your writing. Can't wait to read more.

This was a well written, polished story that managed to avoid all the usual new writer pitfalls. I say well done, especially coming from a drunk!