All Comments on 'Ink My Heart, Pen My Soul Ch. 02'

Whoosh! Welllll ( in my Tom Joyner's voice) Makena need to activate her SBC ( super bitch card ) and let Ms. Jada. know she no joke. How in the hell do you drop off a kid like yesterday trash. This is getting interesting not to mention the Jamaican illustrator is he strictly business now??. I am eager to see what happens next. Possibly two pages next time, just a thought.

But why did you change the perspective from her to him?

Talk about an abrupt turn, left. Or was it to the right? I'm so confused now, it might have been up. But, in a good way, confused.

I kind of thought you overplayed Marcus' aversion to sex. You may be putting too much 'female' in his head. Given their ages, and the past month's history and the circumstance, most guys would have started right on the stairs, screw taking her to the bedroom. But, that's just my perspective.

So, you've thrown a huge wrench in the works, and it's only the second chapter.

GeoD