by EmmyLou93
It was a good premise, but it's terribly structured. No paragraphs, separating dialogue from descriptions and actions. You should re-structure it, and resubmit it. I see the other chapters in this series were fine, it must have been an error with the transfer to Literotica.
Why are you reading the incest section? I think the plot is very sexy.
This was hot, please continue this series. I would love to read more.