All Comments on 'Inspiration Ch. 01'

***** Can't wait to read more!

You, my friend, have written a masterpiece on my favorite subject, that of real love between a brother and sister. This was no "wham bam thank you maam" story simply designed to shock and entice. It is well written with a slow buildup and an extremely satisfying ending and your descriptions are simply mouthwatering. I voted you a 5 with the hope that you write many more.

Hot and I want more just like the twins. The story is hitting close to a brother sister fantasy way back. I didn't have a sister close enough age to make things go. I chose a friend's sister of the right age! Good story I'll enjoy reading more.

RS

this was not good or erotic or realistic it was just plain dumb. if he felt so pissed at the party WHY THE HELL DIDN'T HE JUST LEAVE? I couldn't even finish the first page it was so stupid.

I don't know what Anonymous' problem is, but this was a good start. I will definitely look for the next chapter. And to respond to the comment that Anonymous made: Guys are crazy stupid and will do things that they shouldn't when upset. However, despite getting jealous and upset over his sister's behavior, he WAS NOT going to leave her. He loved her and didn't want anything to happen to her. I can't wait for the next update!

:) Mellie

I love the story but i do believe you could gave used thevterm "bro" i little less.

Your story telling is very compelling. Your "day job" must involve lots of precision, and familiarity with sentence/thought construction. Literotica has little gems of brilliant writing sprinkled through it. Yours is certainly among that wonderful little college of writers.

I, too, look forward to more chapters of this story. It is developing very snugly!

Cheers.

as someone that has loved a family member and was hurt by said love I can say the party scene would not have happened. either he would never have asked her to go or he would have left when she started acting slutty. all in all a waste of time and space.

Does the chick remind anyone else of daenerys targaryen from Game of Thrones? Lol, good story enjoyed it alot looking forward to next part!!!

This is such a good story intro, it even had ME jealous at the party scene. Next chapter here I come

this is so real and yes the party can happen fear that you wont be there for the one you love made me ask my now faience to a party before we started dating it sucked and horrible but it made me realize i loved her with all my heart so when she let some guy grab her ass grind her crotch onto his i lost it to but i remember every detail every bone i broke every punch i threw and received and i hate hurting people by nature and it hurt like hell after words she drove me home put me in bed and started to cry screaming at me that i was and idiot and why could i not just let it go that's when i said i loved her stopped her in her rant and she said quietly why did it take me so long to say it and the rest is history now I'm happy as can be. so yes the party scene can happen its not hard to do something like that because your scared of them asking the person you love to go behind your back and that's what my friend tried to do with my faience it sucks when you don't know if they love you the same way you love them but take that chance or your never going to find out because most of the time there scared and feel the same way about you a lot of the time otherwise why hang out with just you and her or him there are time yes you need to show them that you want to be more then friends but you also have to show them why you should be more then there friend and what makes you worthy of being more then friends

This was a good story. I too like the long play, but it wasn't. As soon as she got to his bedroom she threw herself at him. Where was the innocent virgin? No panties that is a slut move not a virgin move. No one uses the word "bro" at least not that much. Maybe if you are some Russian mobster wannabe in a bad action Flickr, but not in real life. It cheapened the story.

This writer is of the " mouthfuls " of cum school. He delicately refers to the perineum but then indulges in the fantasy of the penis as a sort of oil ( semen ) gusher.

The resit is all slop too.

This is a well written and very hot series. Keep up the good work.

Would be a fairly hot story if the male protagonist weren't such a whiny, entitled tool.

I liked it a lot but I got annoyed by the fact that they kept on calling each other sis and bro. No siblings talk to each other like that and it got annoying fast

brilliant!

for those who don't like it...do not read it! Plain and simple....very well put and eagerly looking forward in reading more. Thank you!

My only complaint is that every time she says “bro” it seems wrong, like a frat boy has inhabited her. Aside from that it is perfect.