All Comments on 'Introducing My Older Sister'

Erotic and romantic; I loved it!

Your buildup is fantastic, your main characters are dynamic, the sex is a little under-detailed in respect to the rest of the story, but hey, Not to many people know how to correctly write sex.

I am definitely looking forward to part 2. you kept me on the edge of my seat waiting to see where this is going. At the conclusion I was mentally excited and looking for another installment or a conclusion

Tantalizing. A little more "sneaky" foreplay and you got it down.

I'm a little tired of being hit over the head with 38-24-36 body dimensions, 10-inch penis sizes, etc. Your writing provided imagery that somehow came mostly from my imagination. That's what writing is all about.

And you also captured the fraternal relationship in a way that is unarguably appealing. There was nothing artificial about your story development, and that's why it was so easy for me as a reader to become part of the story.

Without the titillating behaviors, this story could be published anywhere and I'd want that brother-sister relationship in my life.

Absolutely fantastic. The build up was at a titillating pace.

Yes it needed proof reading but I overlooked all the little mistakes for the pleasure of reading a non bloated story . You weren't crude or violent and that adds to your talent . I do hope you have a part 2 and 3 and 4...........

not the incest part that is weird; it's how she's turned on by her little brother but not other men, and how she's always liked women for sexual partners. <p>

the way the story is told, however, is very real and believable. the older sister even acted like the older sibling: with the typical incest stories, before you have time to read one more word, the author already had them chewing on each other's things.... but here, the author had the older sibling stop, after some tantalizing massage, with the younger sbiling with a boner sticking out, ready to shoot literally, and said, <p>

"I want us to think about this, I want me to have a chance to think about this, because you will be my brother for the next 60, 70 years, but if we have not thought this through more thoroughly, I could be doing a lot of damage to our relationship. And I am supposed to be the more mature of us brother and sister..." <p>

That's VERY GOOD STORY DIALOGUE, dear author. Oh, you eventually come to the erotic sexual activities; but such set up made the story sounding, the characters, "real" and therefore believeable. <p>

Good job.

....It was the best I've read all night. And I've been reading for hours. In fact, I think I'll go to bed now to dream of your creation. Thank you.

The content was outstanding. I think you have laid the foundation for a beautiful sibling love story. I think your style is pretty good, because it allows the reader to fill in certain images with his own imagination. Thanks for you submission. Stay with it and give us a sequel.

good i have sex with older sister too i am from china

she was just useing him and really doesn't love or care about him

Of a very nice story of a relationship between two siblings. I would highly recommend that you make use of spell check, and an editor. You misuse the word "lied" several times, when it should have been "lay or laid" as in "she lay down" Or she laid her head on my chest". See? Lied is the past tense of lie, as in telling a lie. Also while in the pool, you were "waste" deep. That would have correctly been "waist deep".

Simple little errors, and a few times you had a typo with the word "from..having typed it 'form'"

The story was lovely, although I will say, not many will know, which parts of the body you were describing. Remember to keep it simple, and think of how your readers will view your story. Maybe bump up the tempo just a little in your next chapter of their relationship, let some steaminess into the equation ;)

Yes, very good indeed!

please keep going

Please continue

Too bad you quit after one story, you have great skill, you let the action come after building the story up, most people dive in head first. The slow and steady path you took was absolutely perfect.

The author didn't elaborate on he actual sex too much, but did bring out the sweet gentle love between two people, and their feelings for each other.

A well written story with very believable characters.

Thanks for the very good read .

This story is one of the best written stories on this site. It takes it's time to develop and allows the reader to get to the point of truly caring for the characters, their feelings, their hopes, and their plans for the future. I, for one, would love to learn more about these two and what happens as they live their lives. Thank you for introducing us to these wonderful people.

5/5

I saw little buildup to the brother and sister' getting busy '. The author did a decent job of letting us know the two characters who seemed pretty normal like siblings

who had a few shared interests & care for each other.

So nice but so what ? Where is the heat, the fear , the undeniable attraction? They went from going twenty miles an hour then skipping any flirting, teasing and or stolen furtive explorations- bro and Sis are doing 200 miles an hour in carnality zone by copulating after a massage with the only precursor being a slightly inappropriate kiss a few days

I don't want to sound too negative . This story is not the usual literotica dreck. I liked the principals in the story. They were 'nice people ' , mabe too nice to believe they would break this taboo with such a rush .

The sister's lesbian prolictivities were talked about but minimally explored. Trust me , we readers wont be offended by quick graphic scene where big Sis sapphically indulges self.

If the author learns to pace story with gradual ramp up of stages of attraction , maybe a bit more humor ( Scouries is a master of this )there will no doubt be some hot ratings pockmarking the titles of author's future submissions.

If this really is a first attempt, and I find it hard to believe it is, this author is headed for true greatness in whatever genre they choose.

Wowee, sweetie I barely any words If this is your first, I can only hope you continue writing! 5 stars, from me and going into my faves....once I sign-in, which haven't 'cause I'm a lazy heifer, lol! Later, sweetheart! I'll hunt you down again next time I sign-in. Have a great week!

You did a great job on this part now waiting for chapter 2. Thanks

I've read a lot of brother sister stories on this site I guess it a bit of kink for me. I have to say yours is very refreshing change from the norm. I like that while you did some what describe the siblings you wrote in a way that left allowed the reading to create their own image no big dick or big breasts thank you. It came off a very loving and caring relationship as opposed to the impulsive animistic sex that is common on this site. Don't get me wrong both can be good but I personally read the sibling stories for the romance not the hardcore sex. While in certain places it could have a bit more descriptive or clearer would have be nice overall the store a solid 5. I wished you had continued the story to show a truly loving sibling relationship as they both continued to explore their feeling for one another and the separation that is sure to come as he goes off to college and the reunion as he starts a career and hopefully make a life together.

this is a beautiful story. one I wished would have happen to me.

I really enjoyed the story! There was a bit more technical descriptiveness than I prefer, but still good. My only complaint would be the constant use of 'lied' when usually it should have been 'lay'.

Thanks for the great story! Just wish there was a second part!

I had read this story earlier this Spring probably a couple of times when I first started reading here on LIT. I loved it then but I am in awe now. This is not a sex story but an "intimacy " story; about being connected by more than only a physical attraction. But it is still so erotic, sexy and specifically sensual.

There is nothing anyone could even remotely see as vulgar about this story. Not even the usual oral sex and almost no reference to certain parts of the anatomy. Don't get me wrong, I like all of that stuff but it is not always necessary because a beautiful, sensual, meaningful love story like this one has no problem producing a raging hard-on.

There wasn't even the usual obligatory or token "I love you" because it was not necessary. Just 2 people who already had a history and are now in tune with each other.

This story may or may not be completely fiction but it is written in a style that certainly makes one wonder. The slip-up early on when the author used "Mary" instead of "Melody" also makes one wonder.

And though I would love for the author to write more about Melody and Jon, I don't know what direction it would take. But a good writer would already have this worked out.

I don't understand why the voting results aren't higher but I gave it a 5. -dave

This was a great story,but some things just weird like Melody came out as being lesbian to her family,but later claiming she had feelings for her brother,which may have been true,but about Melody saying she was a Lesbian was that just for show to cover for her feelings for her bro,or was she just a part-time lesbian,or bisexual,or experimenting?

I wanna think Melody was a mix of bisexual,and in love with her brother,the way it should be,so she can love her brother plus eat other girls pussies too.Which to me I think is perfect cause all 3 can enjoy each other.

Yes, this reads like a story with real people, at least there were lots of real emotions.

Too bad the author hasn't continued writing erotica.

Not bad for a first story. But u needed better character development. By my reckoning the younger brother was 19. Yet he acted like an immature 15 year old. What 19 year knows nothing of sex I ask you?

As to the sister, at 23, her actions with her proposed Landlord, in front of her brother were outlandish. Who does that?

As to the developing sexual relationship with her brother, it too was out of whack.

It just happened way too fast and the plot device of having her as an experienced Lesbian just to add titillation to the storyline did not work. They both just came on as clumsy.

I see why u did not write here again

The diaphragm was a disappointment however.

A 2⭐️ story for me here,, I can let misspelling go here and there,, but name changes Melody or Mary tossed it off ,,, I am surprised that you didn’t get the landlady and the sister going at it on the apartment hunting with him watching ,,, I almost quit reading it there,, also the way that mom knew about it probably was they got together and hid the lesbian act, from the husband and brother,, , also this read more like a mercy fucking then anything else

There is something about this story that keeps pulling me back. I have read it a few times over the years and have commented on it in the past. Possibly the "Melody vs. Mary" goof was not a goof at all but possibly one of those Freudian slips. Regardless, the inspiration for the story is likely interesting. That might explain why this author only posted this one story. It is a very unique plot and an excellent read imo.

I have read this story a few times in the past and always rated it the max. I keep coming back to it. Only 2 pages long yet it is Very good. Very tender and subtly Hot. Just an observation here, but the word "intimacy" seems to describe the mood of this story. And Melody disclosed to Jon that physical And emotional intimacy is important to her. I think the "intimacy" in the story is what makes the difference between a sex fest and true Erotica. That's the kind of writing i like to read when and If i can find it. Even a story involving an orgy can have intimacy if written properly. Jmo

1/26/2023- I felt like it was time to re-visit "Snowyowl" again today given our current weather situation here in the States. I tend to sound like that old fashioned "broken record" when commenting on this story but i fell in love with these characters. Saddens me that this was not continued as Melody and Jon were just getting started. And yes, again, despite the errors, it is a beautiful story filled with emotion, love, tenderness and trust.

A lovely story.

First attempt? It was wonderful

Very nice job. A few typos here and there but very well written and extremely enjoyable to read. Thank you for your efforts.