by Lost Boy
Love this story and the author is the best. Thanks for sharing, and yes keep'em comin.
It is a small criticism but I feel it is a necessary one.
I think it would have worked better if it was in the third person instead of the first person, except for the actual dialogue, as if a narrator was telling the story.
I was wondering if the story will end on December, 21, 2012, as in like the Mayan Calender, when the world as we know is supposed to end.
A good and exciting chapter.
Thanks for the good read.
i personally dont generally read stories that are more that a few chapters in length but you have such a great talent for writing that i had to keep reading to finish the whole story i cant wait for the next installment, please keep them coming i cant wait to see how this story ends
Not sure if anyone noticed or commented. Nice touch on captain "Moen". Lol.