Isolated Love Ch. 04 Pt. 1

´I don't not understand Arabeth's need to degrade herself as it relates to the story. For instance you had her all gun ho to stay away from Benji even teach him a lesson when she performed oral sex on him, but the later paragraphs do not explain why she fell so hard for. You have not explained to us enough about Arabeth's personality for us to understand the why. One minute she sassy , stay away from me, hiding in bathrooms to avoid Benji and the next she letting him cum in her mouth and taking it as a personal victory and then she is all about making him happy and having to keep him....why?´

Totally agree with this comment. This story lacks motives.

Let me start off by saying you are a very talented writer. The story moves and flows at a nice pace and I enjoyed the addition of the flashback. And I would enjoy reading a Greyson flashback too. However I know I'm just preaching to the choir when I saw Arabeth is a hard read (But I have read The Coldest Winter Ever by Sistah Soljah and reading the character of Winter in that book was an equally hard read). However for me what makes Arabeth so hard to read and what made it tough for me to read this particular except is because...1) I don't not understand Arabeth's need to degrade herself as it relates to the story. For instance you had her all gun ho to stay away from Benji even teach him a lesson when she performed oral sex on him, but the later paragraphs do not explain why she fell so hard for. You have not explained to us enough about Arabeth's personality for us to understand the why. One minute she sassy , stay away from me, hiding in bathrooms to avoid Benji and the next she letting him cum in her mouth and taking it as a personal victory and then she is all about making him happy and having to keep him....why? Help us understand her motivation and then maybe she wouldn't turn us for far against her that we don't even want to read the story anymore. and 2) which is the hardest for me to take is that there is no growth within the character. Remember you wrote the story from the beginning and then flashback. She acted the practically the same with both men. She has people in her life that love and look out for her, yet she disrespect them by ignoring there advice and then she looks to them to bail her out when she's hurt or upset...would that not get old for Ina real quick to have a friend this need and dare I say stupid? Has she really learn nothing in her 2 years with Benji? Maybe you will show us these things as the story progress. I just hope I can stick it out with you for the long haul because Arabeth is really very trying to read. Now I don't want her to make me happy. Bur since she is the main female lead i should be invested in her story to care enough to want to keep reading...and currently she is just too...too for me to not WANT her to see her get everything coming to her. Now if this was what you were going for with her then bravo because you have succeeded. Like I said in the beginning you are very talented and this story and these characters have so much potential. Your editors should help you with this so that you can create the best possible story you can. Hope this helps.

I was hoping this story would get better, who cares about the editing? I mean really with a character as dumb, naive and idiotic as Arabeth, that does nothing but piss me off I'm done. She has to be the worst character I have ever read on this site. 1*

I know a few girls like Arabeth the sad part is that they don't change they just stay stupid girls,but this is a story and Arabeth will luck up with Grayson. See how fast she was ready to jump on Grayson just what 3 days after having her heart broken girls like that just need someone to show them some kind of affection to continue on with their lives.

Yea I met some girls like Arabeth in college and none of them had any self esteem. I'm hopin that she gets some with Grayson tho!! DAYUM good story hunny! ^^