All Comments on 'It's Always Been You'

I like the reminiscing they both did. As they reviewed their separate thoughts, memories and feeling, it built up my expectation, my hope that they would fall in love together. Thanks for sharing this. You should write more.

Such a beautiful, sweet story. The dialogue and the inner dialogs were perfect, very natural, and the bond, the chemistry that two women shared was very real, tangible.

If there is any criticism at all, and I hesitate offering even this, since it irritates me when other readers expect perfection from us as amateur writers, is this: the switch in narrative form, from first to third person and then back again, especially in part 3, when it is all Laura's perspective, was confusing. You might have done better to write all of Sara's story in first and all of Laura's in third, the stories of both women in first person, or the entire story in third. But, like I said, a minor criticism, so please don't be discouraged.

You are clearly a talented writer, and I loved your charming, beautiful story, and fell in love with both characters. Please write more!

A very well-written and interesting story. Sensitve, great expression of emotion, thought and passion. Your use of dialouge is impressive. It gives the characters life and realistic believability. Please write more.

This is such a beautiful story. Please write what happens next (:

I really did enjoy how realistic it was and how you built up suspense. I really enjoyed this story very much.

I really liked the way you wrote this! The dialogue is great! Please write more!

Good and sweet, but the change in viewpoint between Sara and Laura confused me. Strong technicals, no quibbles. Please write more. I'm going to give this story a plug on my Embarrass de Richesse microblog on AH.

Really enjoyed this story, seemed so right!

Simply blew my socks off...

Thanks for a great story.

Fantastic story!

This Is Your First Submission. It's Such A Beautifully Witten'Love Story.

The Build Up Of Over 4yrs of Friendship & Hidden Love.

I Really Wish You Would Write A Continuation. This Really Deserves

More.

Kisses

I want to know what happens next!!!

' This was a breath taking story i absoulotly love it !

It reminds me of a very similar event in my life although sadly not with the same outcome of this story. But if i had it my way it would have been.

Thanks for the ending i never got !

Regards Eliza .x

This story makes me want to seduce my best friend. Well written!!! I loved it.

wow this was so beautiful - it took my breath away

Work on your writing. It's terrible. Stories shouldn't switch between third and first person. Plus the part 1, part 2 thing was stupid.

I actually liked that you switched it up giving us different perspectives without being repetitive. I like knowing what both people are thinking. The only thing is when did Sarah's pants come off? One minute Laura was slipping her hand into her panties, the next she was going down on her. Just be careful with that but otherwise, I loved it. Keep it up :)

The story was genuinely emotional, but the structure took some getting used to. My only criticisms would be spend more time with each character to get a better feel for the moments that led them to fall in love. Even in denial, Sara had to have some key experiences with Laura. Also, slipping from first to third person was distracting. It detracted from the overall emotional impact of the tale, but not egregiously. Still choosing one and staying with it would make the tale a better read. All in all, pretty good. I look forward to reading part two.

Noew, to the anonymous who posted on 10/2, if you're going to respond to a story and critique the style in which it is written, try to have something worthwhile to say. Your response sounds like that of a six year old. If that post is an example of the insight you have to offer the authors, perhaps you should limit yourself to simply voting on the stories and forego any written comments.

Simple & heartfelt, sometimes love sneaks up on us, sometimes it hits us over the head, sometimes - it's both

DKP

Aagh, ready for chapter two, really enjoyed this

Great story! Please continue I would like to know how it all works out.

This story was a good read, and I enjoyed it immensely. Thank you for sharing it with us!

I read this years ago and love it just as much now.

Really liked this story. This is what deep friendship is all about between two lovers.