by RedHeadedSlutRaina
Good first submission. it was hot and i can't wait to see how it plays out
I loved the story
but please dont involve a guy...
1 it wouldnt be credible as Craig has been presented so far as GAY I know it sometimes happens that a gay guy isnt as gay as he likes to believe but thats a rarer event than either a heteroman getting into a threesome or three girls doing a threesome or even 2 hetero guys and one girl
2 personally guy/girl/girl threesome stories are more likely to fall flat than stories than either guy/girl or girl/girl stories
please develop both girls personalities.. Jackies history is as yet unstated --- maybe have her tell of her earlier girl girl experiences, maybe have each of them have other experiences with others and with each other even a grie girl girl threesome? be creative and desicriptive and sexy
anyway I lookforward to chapter 2
Jo
PS love your pic
youwrite very well and your sdtory is hot. i eagerly await more chapters. i can envision your unbelievable, full lips workingon a juicy pissy. i can dream lf licking the cum off them and i can almosy feel them massaging cock to an explosuve orgasm. if there is anything autobiographical about this story, i hope you are moving on in your life. maybe a full picture?
I gotta say, I liked this story. It was a bit short for my taste, had a couple of weird phrasings, but all in all I liked it! I look forward to more!
Keep it between the girls. Make sure Jenna returns the favor. Would love to see stories about your own experiences as that pic is very alluring and your lips and eyes make us easily imagine a beautiful tongue exploring a woman from below... Thanks
This was a great story. It was hot and the characters relatively believable. It would not have hurt to be longer. And I'd love to read stuff with Jenna in the future. Keep up the good work.