by RedHeadedSlutRaina
you are developing the charachter of jackie excellently sexy action is even sexier when the charachter of at least one of the parties is believeable and desireable
but a little rushed. The almost-foreplay was very exciting, and I can understand if you rushed it to illustrate how hard and fast the encounter was, but it was far too short even by quickie-standards.
Just like the first story, very entertaining, but rather quick aka short with a hurried ending. It doesn't need to be long and drawn out but just like sex dont rush it, and no slam bam thank you maam. Keep up the good work.