All Comments on 'Jamaican Getaway Ch. 01'

I enjoyed reading this first chapter & I can't wait to read the next chapter.

went a little to fast, but loved it, can't wait for more

loved the story cant wait to see what happens next

Thanks for writing and submitting. I did find the story a little awkward to read, without too much flow, but don't have any suggestions beyond that.

you expect us to believe that even though he acts like a total ass hole that she is willing to screw him no way she would find a way to avoid him and sleep out side if needed she sure wouldn't screw him total waste of time what you described should have taken place over a couple of months not days get a good editor and do a rewrite and slow it way down so it is more realistic and believable

Please tell me she is knocked up now. Need more. Hot fucking story! Write more.

Please continue the story.