by link7777
You need to write more, so come up with a way to further their family adventure. Add Kelly's mom or sister maybe. Or throw in one of Jans friends. The only limit to it is your sick imagination. LOL! Whatever you choose to do...write!
The first two were AMAZING!! I had fun reading them over and over, MORE PLEASE!! I'm begging you!! x]
The story is just getting good. As someone said earlier, all the asterisks "are" a bit distracting, in fact, quotation marks (") are commonly used to emphisize words instead of asterisks. BUT, you haven't got to the part where Janets dad deflowers her! You can't leave that out!. Or where Kelly teaches Jan how to suck cock, & how to use toys when her dad's on business trips. & also, yes bring in some of Janets friends &/or Kelly's family. There are so many more avenues you can go with this story. Please keep writing & we'll keep reading!!!!
You should at least write one more part. As they way you wrote it. Jan is still a virgin. Daddy needs to fuck her. Have his cock deep inside and cum inside her. Take her cherry.
Agree there should be at least one more part have him take both her cherries her pussy and her arse
What is it with all these *s and your inconsistent use of 'scare' quotes Why the fuck are there 'quotes' around the word 'cunt'? Did you grow up in a *convent*?
The sex scenes are boring and repetitious. She tastes semen for the first time. Big yawn.
I mean, fuck.
Screw all the negative comments.
It was GREAT. *"Always leave the audience wanting a little more "*
a realy wonderful story i love these erotic love of daddy /daughter and stepmothers,