All Comments on 'Jelly Bean and Her Bail Bondsman Ch. 01'
by beagle9690
- 6 Comments
Anonymousabout 13 years agogood story but the writing makes it very unpleasant to read, with some good and thurough editing it would be much easier to read
right now the sentence strucure is just ruining the quality of the overall contents
Anonymousabout 13 years agoI got caught in an interesting detailed story that was built brick by brick.
It was very through and complete. I am looking forward to the next chapter with great interest.
Anonymousabout 13 years agoA very enjoyable story, but I have to agree with the others that a bit of editiing would be very helpful. Great character development, and I liked your idea of shifting from one point of view to another. Keep that, but work on the structure a bit. By all means keep writing! I will be watching anxiously for chapter two.
marlam5about 13 years agoA very good story that I enjoyed very much.
Looking forward to part two.
I agree with most of the other commentators; do some editing yourself or find someone to do it for you.
The story deserves it.
Really love your writting.
You're one of my favourit writers.
Anonymousover 6 years agoFive stars!
I must say that this is a good one. Character development, engaging to the reader, and plot development are really the first rate.
Look forward to Chapter 2.
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