All Comments on 'Jocelyn'

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avengilineavengilinealmost 8 years ago
ehh......

Personally I think it didn't have enough substance. You can't rush sex, love or lust. It's needed to be little more drawn out and if he cared for her in anyway I think he would have fucked her.

They didn't know each other. It seems like she's gonna be his concubine....and 6'9".....a little freaky, no? I'm 5'2", so he's a giant to me and I wouldn't go anywhere near him....like ever....what if he fell...I would die.....

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 13 years ago
More!!!!!!!

TOO SHORT WANTED MORE........

AnonymousAnonymousover 16 years ago
Chapter 2?

The king definitely was a smooth one in this story! It was a very interesting twist. Perhaps you could elaborate more of the story in another chapter?

AnonymousAnonymousover 17 years ago
Fuckin hot

Fuckin hot hot hot

KewlBlueTigerKewlBlueTigerabout 18 years ago
King me!

The king was a smooth mover in this one. I wonder what he has in store for Jocelyn in the palace, and what the Queen will think - if there is one. Good descriptions. I liked it.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 18 years ago
Hot story !!!

A totally hot story ! I loved it !!! Good writing style, good imagination, good stuff all around !!

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