by Bill_Monosand
I love that line!! It's so unique. hahaha This was an nice long chapter too so extra points! :)
one, love that it's set in sydney cause i'm from newtown.
two, man such a good story! can't wait for more, really can't, the sexual tension between is the two is amazingly written.
keep on writing
Great story!!!! The character build up id famtastic and really sizzling! Lovely to see more Australian stories on this sight :-)
This story keeps getting better and better. Loved the longer chapter. The editing made this story pop! Great job and can not wait to see what happens between Jon and Jasper.
Hey Guys and Gals!
I am super busy at uni at the moment, but I am hoping to get a new chapter up soon. I really appreciate your comments and encouragement.
-Billy
ps. Thanks for your patience
why oh why are all the fit, funny family orientated ones gay?! Lol. Its a brilliant story, truly believable, and i cant wait for the next chapter...dont work too hard now!
You have a nice flow going here. Great sense of humor from both Jasper and Jon. Keep up to good work. :D
I now study in Melbourne. A good suprise that the story takes place in Australia. Are you an Aussie? The setting is so real. The build up of the story is very well written and I can really connect to the main characters. In short, I totally love it. Can't wait for the next chapters! :D
I HAVE JUST POSTED CHAPTER FOUR!!!
IT SHOULD BE UP IN A DAY OR SO....
Much love, Billy.
Totally enchanting story...the slow to burn beginning that you're building is creating alot of frustration....I want to see these two finally face what they feel. I love the reality you put in it with the medical lingo and situations. I think even more comments to each other about things from their past may help us to learn what brought them to where they are today. Lookin forward to more.
Excellent writing, perfect pacing, lovely characters. And PLEASE ignore all mean comments from Dinkyboots - Dinkyboots is an arsehole.
This is so good. It's easy to see the action in your head! Keep writing please!