All Comments on 'Katarzyna Ch. 01'

This story is totally unreadable. Massive run-on sentences, punctuation errors, odd wordings, misused words. It's impossible to even understand any of it. I can't believe anyone approved it. Maybe you can get someone to do some proofreading for you; preferably someone who is very fluent in the English language. As it stands, it stinks.

I only made it to the second paragraph. Stop writing, please

Learn where to use and not use commas.

But I'm sure BigDaddyRich will come in a say it was a well written story (as usual).

Getting an editor to help with your writing will help you immensely. It seems as if English is not your primary language so having that editor to fine tune the story will help a lot.

Good luck with future writings.

2. Stop writing until you learn enough to put together a sensible sentence.

what is this i dont even

Maz Liliany nie powinien byc oziebly. Fakt, moge mu sprzedac film, kopie filmu, ktorego nie powinno bylo byc, ochroniarskiego, z party po godzinach, gdzie miala trzech na raz oraz 4 jeden po drugim. Cena, jest siedem tysiecy dolarow. To samo co do Kasi oraz sksu z jej bosami. Siedem tysiecy. Zamiac byc oziebly, to trzeba w zadek walic, a w malutka tylko jak zasluzy. jak cos szczeka to w gardziolko, az sie porzyga. Do tego, jak powie, ze na rogu nie stala, to wystawic na rog!