by mannytheman
Author needs to either begin a new story or do more frequent updates (faster than over a year between).
way to long and confusing slow down and add more details we don't know what is in your head you have to spell everything out it's your story so you know what is happening we don't
i am really waiting for the next chapter need a conclusion please really great stories
either finish or delete as is you wasted our time with a partial rushed story that was poorly written and sure wasn't edited.
Yes, Jack is a sexy guy, but we need details! Any hair on that gorgeous chest? Pubic bush? I know he has a great cock that Kathy loves, but I like to see hair on a man's chest -- not gobs of it, but a nice dusting mat of hair that a woman can run her fingers through -- soft, silky stuff!
Let Lydia find her own guy. Leave Jack and Kath to themselves. Threesome or sharing does not make it better.
Is that the end. Please don't let anyone come between jack and kath. It sounded that was the way they were headed. Would spoil a good story.
Well, it was good while it lasted. Sigh. I saw the horrible writing on the wall when I read the comments in the last chapter and the guy was complaining about wanting the next chapter. In 2009. Lol. Ten years later and no more chapters, damn. They were pretty short though:/.
Ive never been a chapter fan, unless the author has the whole story written and he's just uploading one every fee days or something. I usually forget to check back, unless I just leave a browser tab open on the page.
Sigh.
Good story, but it ended abruptly with much left to do and say.
Because of the unfinished nature of the story, scores 3/5
Stories like this one, that have been abandoned by author’s who don’t write anymore yet still have potential, need to be picked up and finished by active authors and continued to a successful conclusion