All Comments on 'Keeping in Practise'

first story- You are doing a great job. I have one suggestion though.

When you do the third story summarize the earlier chapters as your intro.

Waiting patiently for chapter three though.

What a delight to find an erotic story where people have arses - not donkeys, for behinds and with no gotten, snuck or dove. A delight to read well written English. Thank you!

for using some Americanisms!

any one who use single quotes as opening and closing quotes --- in these and age when we good Americans have been teaching the double and much easier to see/read quote system --- ought to be sent to Guantanamo for punishment!

I think when some bloody Brits use the single quote system, they are just trying to irritate Americans! It is a good thing, therefore, that you're not doing that!

I can deal with "I spelt that correctly" much more easily than reading,

''Twas Katie's', said Mrs. McColough,,,,,, (bloody Brits)

when it ought to be

"'Twas Katie's", said Mrs. McColough

again, personally I think any one persists in using that old English single quote system should be punished very severely!

You are setting a sensitive pace for the progress of the relation between sister and brother. Looking forward to the next chapter.

Before sounding off, you should be sure of your facts.

In American we practice all the time as practice makes perfect. There is no distinction between noun and verb spelling.

In English we practise all the time because practice makes perfect. The verb MUST be spelled with an 's' and the noun with a'c'.

Your first title, Just Practising was perfect English - using the verb form. This title is incorrect - it has to be Keeping in Practice (noun).

Just think of a doctor's practice, football practice. I must do some practise before my piano practice.

Fun to correct a Brit's English.

Story's good anyway.

I applaud the author for remaining true to our foundation of modern language. I would thankfully kiss you on the lips for remaining pure.

Much love,

~Mimi

That was Awsome. Please continue the story.

Don't stop. The story and mood are great.

Just as good as the first.

From most of the stories I read I thought all women had D+ breasts and all men had 12" dicks. I like stories like yours that are more realistic,

Don't worry about having a different style of speech and writing then others, if they can't understand it, then they don't know how to read. I found this very enjoyable, and I'm loving how they are going through things slowly. Nice story.

Thanks for a great 2nd Chapter. When readers get stuck on grammatical miscues and punctuation marks instead of the story line, then I think that they may have too much time on their hands and need to use it to whank-off! Keep up the good work. Am waiting for Chapter 3, 4, etc.!

we need a third chapter now please. one where they fuck like rabbits !!!!!!!

Your job is to convey to the reader the tone,feeling and emotion of the story and to make it real and believable. In reality it should not make any real difference what countries spelling you use but unfortunately to some it does. I personally enjoyed your stories and felt emotion from your words. Please continue with this story.

Carefully structured, giving a very realistic feel to the story - and making it more erotic as a result. Ignore the moaners - stick to your guns. Your spelling and grammar are way better than most Literotica submissions. Will we get a third part of the story, as it seems that these two are really ready to play some more? Alan (UK)

I am american but have lived my life around the english lifestyle. It is a wonderful enjoyment to read the words that are spelt in different ways and the style of writing too. When I read the first line of just practising I was excited, talk about sixth forms. I absolutely love the stories, I was wondering though; when the next will be coming?

I didn't really notice your British style of spelling in the first one; but the second one I actually enjoyed more as I could almost hear that sexy English accent through the writing. The story is well written and well punctuated and anyone that has issues just needs to get a life.

Great chapter 2, if a little unbelievable. Sis gives him a blowjob right away ? I would have thought she would have him practice eating her pussy, before she sucked his cock. I love making my lover cum in my mouth, before we make love. Wish one of my sisters would have helped in that, too. Every man needs to be taught how to eat pussy, so that she not only gets aroused, but cums in his mouth. What's next for chapter 3 ? 69ing, or intercourse ? Keep practicing, practice makes perfect !

I thoroughly enjoyed both of your chapters and hope you are able to continue it someday.

perfect. very realistic. well written and tender.

A truly wonderful story! Glad to see that you write in proper English as well :D

I enjoy your writing,,,,nothing is rushed and its very hot and exciting. Please write the ending,,,,,I am wet waiting for it,,,

I love your writing style and can picture your every word - the mark of a great writer. Please continue Katie !