All Comments on 'Kill My Husband, Please'

write. The one that really got my attention was the use of me instead of my. That is something you would expect a 4 yo to do. Characters were all, how shall we say, very stupid and ignorant. Cleaned up a bit it would make a nice comedy.

The appearance of me instead of my or my instead of me is known as a typing literal. I get some but not all of them and no, in case you are thinking it, don't be like a lot of other know-alls and say get an editor. I don't want an editor and that's my choice. If you don't like that response then don't read my work. I would point out a lot of people don't write like you do. I write a story how I want to tell it. And it's fiction. Either you are grumpy today or need to go somewhere else to read, but thank you for your comment. You will probably be a happier person, perhaps even a better person, if you read and stop nitpicking. EG

All the doublecrossing in this story is ridiculous.

You know EG writes for food coupons and when negative comments causes him to rant and rave and start foaming at the mouth about persecution, then the old age home nurses disconnects the battery on his wheel chair. Shame on you!

You gutless wonder - I thought Kiwis wouldn’t hide in the bog using the name Anonymous. And who's ranting? You have identified yourself. You attack the author like a deranged person and not the story. What a creep. Just one of the vile vermin that has infiltrated Literotica; shame on you. And how dare you attack old men in wheelchairs. You need detoxing. Oh, if you do write and post on this site please identify to me your work and allow me the opportunity of rating your masterly work. EG

I thought it was funny, different, and not sure about the ending, so I read it twice. Anything I can read twice gets a 75 at least. Thanks.

Doublecrosses, backstabbes and shortchanged russians, oh my. Could have done away with the last bit about the letter. Kind of muddied up the hazeyness you had perfected.

this was an awful story. that said, it was interesting and would like to know if you're going to write a second part because i want to see how the "hero" handles pats betrayal.

It seems that there was too many details involved to have this tale done in two pages. Good story but too short to fully appreciate. Still quite interesting.

but I liked it. I don't know what the point of the letter at the end was about as it just seemed like a way to cause Ben to push his blackmailing evidence into the open. That part just seemed really stupid. you could have ended before you put that bit of silliness in.

Stupid nonsense, stupid characters, what a piece of junk!!!

It makes me vomit

An early attempt at having AI write a story, or did OP imbibe and post? Some explanation is needed for such a terrible piece from an otherwise good scribe.