All Comments on 'Kim in the Kitchen'

Don't stop now! Look forward to seeing more.

Not bad, a good idea and some decent pacing but a little more drama and a bit of lingering here or there would help. Minor issues with some punctuation and word use/misuse but other wise a good start. What happens the next time she sees him at the house with her son and his friends, the wordless acknowledgements.....the eye contact.... The body reactions....... You've got something good started, keep it going.

you should submit more. this was really good.

hope you have more like this ... or possibly a part II

Very hot start but a bit disappointed with the ending, which happened all too quickly and with not enough detail... hope the story continues though :D

This was great start, looking forward to more. Possibly continuing this story.

Good start need to expand story and build it up

Horribly written, please pick up a book on english grammer before you write again!

While yes the grammar needs to be corrected the story itself was excellent. I, for one, would like to see a part 2!!

Loved this story. Hopefully you make a part 2.