All Comments on 'Kissing Cousins Pt. 01'

WAYYY too much detail. Also need an editor,

Native Floridian native? I stopped right there.

Despite issues of grammar and detail, this story is off to a very interesting start. You have left us, the readers of this story, hanging on your elipses and begging for at least one more Part to this story. But please don't end Part 02 the same way, or we will think that you are merely trying to be cute.

Good intro I suppose but no story. Really?

"Anonymous - "total rubish""

If you are going to make a judgement on someone else's writings at least learn to spell.

Is this a middle school ESL project?

You need to skip out on all that extra stuff and focus on writing about the main characters! All that height and weight and family ancestory dont mean shit!

Also Make the chapter longer and include some sex if you want to hook your readers! After all this is "literotica"